TED Resume: How to Speak so that People Want to Listen
There are four really powerful cornerstones, foundations, that we can stand on if we want our speech to be powerful and to make a change in the world. Fortunately, these things spell a word. The word is HAIL, and it has a great definition as well. The "H" is honesty, being true in what you say, being straight and clear. The "A" is authenticity, just being yourself. The "I" is integrity, being your word, actually doing what you say, and being somebody people can trust. The "L" is love, wishing people well, for two reasons. Absolute honesty may not be what we want. Tempered with love, honesty is a great thing. If we are really wishing somebody well, it is very hard to judge them at the same time.
There are four really powerful cornerstones, foundations, that we can stand on, if we want to haveour speech to be powerful and to make ...
Fortunately, these things spell a word .
The "H" is honesty, being true in what you say... >> you have make clear definition of that term
The "A" is authenticity, just being yourself. >> you need to make it more clear
The "I" is integrity, being your word, actually doing what you say... >>it is good idea
Hello Erwiin1, I want you obtain suggestions from me, here we go:
There are four really powerful cornerstones,and foundations, that we can stand on ...
The "A" is authenticity, you just being yourself.
.., and being somebody people can trust you .
... wishing people well, for two reasons [what the two reasons you explain, there are in this essay? .]
please use more cunjunction and adverbial clause for your essay and keep writing longer and usual to try more advance.
note: keep writing and go ahead.
Hello Erwin
there are two advice to you, hope it can help you
There are four really powerful cornerstones, (and) foundations
.....i think you do not need comma, but and
... powerful cornerstones, foundations,thatwe(it) can stand on if we want ...
... i think it more better if you make a new sentence over there
There are four really powerful cornerstones, foundations( YOUR SENTENCES NEED A VERB S+ VERB AGREEMEN )
Fortunately, these things spell a word( S + VERB AGREEMEN)
Absolute honesty may not be what we want . ( S+ VERB AGREEMEN)
--------------------) PAY ATTENTION WITH YOUR STRUCTURE
KEEP FIGHT!
Hi erwin 1,let me give some advice,perhaps useful for you.
1.There are four really powerful cornerstones, foundations, that we can stand on...-----> you just need put one word. both of them almost same meaning.
2. The "A" is authenticity, you just being yourself
3.The "L" is love, wishing people well, for two reasons. ----> you should be put the next sentence, or it called supporting sentences , to explain what is the two reasons.
Hi Erwin, first of all WELCOME to the Essay Forum Team, we hope you find this website helpful to your writing projects and we aim to provide you with a comprehensive feedback and constructive criticism in order to enhance your essay and be ready for submission.
Moving forward, please find a few suggestions for your essay below;
- There are four really powerful cornerstones,or foundations,
- that we can standrely on
- if we want our speechvoice to be powerful
- Fortunately, these things spell athe word.
There you have it Erwin, as you can see, the enhancement is very minor, though it will be great if it is perfect, overall, the essay speaks for its purpose and the purpose is, for people, the readers, to understand what we can do to make the world a better place not only for the next generation but more importantly, for todays generation to live a more comfortable and morally able life.