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Learning foreign language is an important foundation for the future - preparing for the entrace exam


Vi Sa 1 / -  
Feb 22, 2016   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: "All children should learn at least one foreign language at school"? Write a paragraph (120-150 words) to express your personal point of view.

Personally, I totally agree with the statement: "All children should learn one foreign language at school". First and foremost, the world has become more and more flat and language is that connects people. Furthermore, children is the future of a country who will take reponsibility for developing the country. Nowadays, business and commerce are increasingly driven by international trade, as a result, that knows one foreign laguage means human find it easier to integrate with the world and develop the economy of the country. On the other hand, on learning a foreign language, children are also taught about culture of that country, so they can get much helpful knowledge as well as train their memories naturally. Therefore, it can be said that learning a foreign language is an important foundation so that children can run the word in the future.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Feb 22, 2016   #2
It is always good to develop your paragraph with these steps;
1. Topic sentence
2. Explanation
3. Example
4. Concession

A closer look at my sample

(1) The idea that children should be taught a second language at school is the most valued by some people. (2) This is because teaching a foreign language early helps them provide vocabulary framework. (3) In my local city, two- and 3-year-olds sent to language schools are taught daily vocabularies dealing with home activities, such as cooking and bathroom occupations, and this has meant that they have more words to understand rather than those who do not come to English class. Bilingual kids are able to think a little more flexibly because they can switch between one language and the other one. (4) Yet, this is not always true. Some children take more time to grasp the language taught and therefore this makes them easily get stressed.

Hope this helps :D
Crystal812 23 / 55 11  
Feb 22, 2016   #3
language is that connects people. (It seems that you lose a conjuntion in the sentence)

that knows one foreign laguage means human find it easier (if you want a verb to be a subject, use the -ing form)

run the word (I can not understand what you want to express. Is it a spelling mistake? I guess you want to say "world" not "word")
Bunglon11 28 / 31 5  
Feb 25, 2016   #4
Hi @Vi Sa let me check your essay

... a country who will take responsibilityreponsibility for developing the country.
... a result, that knows one foreign languagelaguage means human find it ...
... children are also taught about a culture of that country, so they ...

I have read your essay, you should enlarge your ideas, such as:
1. Main idea, explanation or supporting idea, example, effect or result or concession, and.
2. Main idea, supporting idea, explanation, supporting idea 2, explanation, supporting idea 3

I hope it helps


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