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To what level do you agree that Unis should accept equal numbers of male and females?


phanhuyen 2 / 3  
Jul 27, 2010   #1
Please help me to correct it!
Topic:" Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female in every subject". To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Done:
In our contemporary, there is a striking increase in the number and importance of women in the society. As a result, many people think that universities should receive a balanced number of candidates who are male and female in all subjects. However, this causes certain issue like poor teaching quality because students are not chosen due to their abilities and interests.

First of all, universities should base on students' performance in preuniversity years for their input. If they require the same female students males, unfairness would appear for those who being qualified but not chosen and those who attend university because of their gender although there is a gender balance.

Secondly, few courses are well more suited to a particular sex group. For instance, women are likely to prefer some majors such as psychology or obstetrics while men are used to show more interest in engineering or mechanism. If there are the same quantity of female as male in engineering subject in universities, it probably creates lazy students because they have no passion with subject they are studying.

In conclusion, it is clearly seen that students are used to entrying into an universities according to their performance and concerns therefore it is impossible for universities to accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject but certain ones.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jul 27, 2010   #2
In our contemporary society, there is a striking increase in the number and importance of women in the society.

Secondly, a few courses are well more suited to a particular sex group. For instance, women are likely to prefer some majors such as psychology or obstetrics while men are used to show more interest in engineering or mechanis m.--- no, no... this part is not good. This is the part that shows that OLD gender roles are still being kept alive in your mind. I know women who would be much better at engineering than I am, because regardless of gender we all have different kinds of intelligence.

The last paragraph is very good! I agree with your idea --- it should be based on performance. But, do not write anything about jobs women are better-suited for. None of us can say a particular job is better for a particular gender.

:-)
OP phanhuyen 2 / 3  
Jul 28, 2010   #3
Kevin! Thank you so much!
Kevin! In our contemporary society, there is a striking increase in the number and importance of women in the society.
Could I should replace society by life or world to avoid repeating society?
OP phanhuyen 2 / 3  
Jul 28, 2010   #4
Kevin!
First of all, I like this forum so much, it helped me meeting good person like you who show the wrong points in my writing. Actually, it is so useful for a learner like me.

Secondly, I feel that it is so difficult for me to continue posting new threads with my limited ability as well as buy a credit by money. Also, it is not fair if I post something as same as spam in other topic.

Finally, I do want to show my highest respectful things to you.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jul 30, 2010   #5
In our contemporary society, there is a striking increase in the number and importance of women in the society.
Could I should replace society by life or world to avoid repeating society?

No, if you did that it would still sound strange. Do this:
In our contemporary society, there is a striking increase in the number and importance of women. in the society.
Good question!!

it is so difficult for me to continue posting new threads with my limited ability as well as buy a credit by money. Also, it is not fair if I post something as same as spam in other topic.

I'm not sure what you mean by this. Can you explain again? What is your question? Anyway, I look forward to working with your essays! :-)
OP phanhuyen 2 / 3  
Aug 1, 2010   #6
Kevin!
To continue posting new threads, I must post my comment in other topics, at least 4 comments. Actually, I could not fix the mistakes from other topics, it is out of my ability. Also, I could not afford to buy the credit by my money.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Aug 2, 2010   #7
Oh... I didn't know about the changes that were made with the policies. Okay, well the thing I need to tell you is that you DO have the ability to comment on other people's essays. You do not have to correct mistakes. All you have to do is leave a few sentences to tell what the essay made you think of... to tell what the essay reminded you of... tel tell about any parts you did not understand.

You must contribute that way. You can do it! I'm sorry to have to insist, but it is a necessary part of how to learn here. Try to be fearless, and go talk to someone about her essay. She will appreciate it!!

Just do this:
Hello, I am still trying to learn English so I cannot correct mistakes, but I wanted to tell you that I understood that part of the essay where you wrote about _________.

I did not understand the part where you wrote about ___________.
I like the part where you wrote about ___________.

I'm glad you mentioned this!


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