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IELTS - Writing Task 1 Level of education of Bulgarians planning to leave Bulgaria


Ilmi_03 47 / 69 11  
Aug 11, 2016   #1
The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.

The bar chart illustrates the educational qualification of Bulgarian people who intend to move to a new country between 2002 and 2008. Overall, it can be seen that, the percentage of secondary education graduate decreased slightly while those obtained primary and lower degree rose steadily over the period.




Permata92 3 / 5  
Aug 11, 2016   #2
Hallo ilmi, i would like to left a comment in your writing practice in IELTS.

Your introduction and trend is great and better for u to continue your writing.

I will give you feedback, you can replace 'between 2002 to 2008' to 'in the past of 6 years between 2002 to 2008'

And for the trend i suggest you to using simple present tense because it is the general data.

For the body, you can put the data by comparing the year or the level of education.

I hope it will help you to improve your writing skill. Please left a comment in my essay. Thank you 😊
kobayakawa07 8 / 13  
Aug 12, 2016   #3
Hi Ilmi. Your introduction is almost perfect. I like it very well :)

You can paraprahe it good, however I would like to give somethings. First, it is better to replace "country" to other word such as "nation" since that world has already been used in the question. Moreover, it is better to transform "people" with other words, such as Inhabitants.

I think that's all. Thank you ^_^


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