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What you do and what you do not like about your city?

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Jun 22, 2014   #1
[b]What you do and what you do not like about your city

Nothing in this world is perfect. Similarly, my city has both advantageous and disadvantageous. I like my city in some part and don't like in some parts.

I like my city because it is naturally beautiful. To me nature beauty occupies the most important part in my life because I love visiting places, where nature is dancing. Usually once a year, I travel for playing with the nature gift. Swimming in the rivers, though it is dangerous, is the most favorite activity for me.

The other most important part that I like about my city is its arts and architecture. My city is renowned in the world by its ancient arts and architecture. In a few kilometers away, I can reach the beautiful architecture places. Usually, I spend my evening time in such areas with my friends.

Despite my likeness, I do have some unwanted things about my city. Now days, the population of the people is increasing in a very fast manner. I have to go more than five kilometer to have a fresh air in an open area. Similarly, I have to face a traffic game, air pollution, water shortage and so forth and so on.

Thus, these are the liking and disliking of my city.
SalMon 27 / 113 10  
Jun 23, 2014   #2
next time remember to include the type of task you are doing so that it would be easier for us to assess won't you?

You conclusion is... er... it's too short in any kind of test. It makes the reader feel disatisfied because it doesn't end properly.

You need to improve your vocab (don't repeat words), your structure, grammar, preposition, particles and the way to express your idea must be more attractive :) Hope I can help :)

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