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IELTS TASK 2 - Living in high-rise apartment less community spirit


Bayuwibowo 48 / 73 21  
Sep 5, 2015   #1
Some people say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it's advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss advantages and disadvantages. Give your opinion.

Answer :

Several citizens who are live in tall flat believe have better experience in social life whereas the others say staying in apartment has isolate your social life. In my opinion , although modern flat has an advantage for the community like living in same building, that negative effects outweighs the positive effect including the inhabitants are busy with their own business and do not know the neighborhoods.

There is a benefit for people living in flat located in enormous city. Since the citizens stay in an equal building, they can easily meet. The doors which divide one another are only in a few feet distance, and that condition leads the residents easier to communicate. To sum up, dwelling in flat give better community experience and it is also noticeable that urban dwellers staying in apartment have an equal occupation.

Apart from these benefit, the person who dwell in large flat has detrimental effects. For instance, the dweller are busy with their own business since their working time exceeding 12 hours a day. This circumstances create the residents more selfish and ignore the surroundings. Furthermore, from the latest news in BBC there was murdering in an apartment in Jakarta, and unfortunately the occupant staying in same places did not acquainted the victim.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that the corrosive effect is greater than the positive effects related to social life. Where possible residents who life in house or high rise-apartment must respect to the others and immense charitable enthusiasm among all.

faarasyad 7 / 15 7  
Sep 5, 2015   #2
Hi Bayuwibowo

Several citizens who are live in tall flat believe have better experience in social life whereas the others say staying in apartment has isolate your social life. In my opinion , although modern flat has an advantage for the community like living in same building, that negative effects outweighs the positive effect including the inhabitants are busy with their own business and do not know the neighborhoods.

this is my suggestion for your introduction.

Modern society in developed nation tends to live in architecture building such flat. While it is completely true that this encourages novelty experience in social life, since numerous communities stay in the same building, apartment has isolated social relationship when it comes to long-term work hours and less interaction among apartment dwellers. In my perspective, this drives to dire effects which outweigh the benefit.

you have to make sure the differences between life and live

hopefully this will help you.
ChamiJaya 1 / 3 1  
Sep 6, 2015   #3
Some people say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it's advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss advantages and disadvantages. Give your opinion.

I would write the introduction as follows.

It is argued that residents of high-rise buildings do not have better social life compared to people who are living in single dwellings. However, the opponents argue that living in these apartments have enormous benefits. This essay will discuss both negative and positive impacts of living in these urban apartments and outline my opinion.

Disadvantages
1. Lack of space in the dwellings
2. Lack of garden or entertainment area for gatherings.
3. Safety issues - high risky especially fire hazards
4. Lack of privacy; noisy neighbours

Advantages:
1. Easy to maintain
2. Easy access to all the amenities
3. Suitable for modern developments

Conclusion


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