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Logging impact. A great deal of the industries commit the activities of cutting down trees.


Aris05 31 / 24 1  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
The summary of Environmental Impacts of Logging

A great deal of the industries commit the activities of cutting down trees. They need it for the raw material of various products. The logging can generate the downside for the environment like pollution, habitat loss and climate change. Trees give the protection to the soil. Their leaves are able to prevent the top soil run off when the rain comes. The roots can avert the direct erosion as well. The felling of the trees directly harms the water habitats because it will speed up the erosion. When the erosion occurs, the materials of soil will consume the oxygen and cause the oxygen reduction in the water. The deforestation also maintains pollutants airborne where the acid rain is caused by this situation. Moreover, it contributes to twenty percent of the carbon dioxide emissions in the worldwide responsible for creating of the climate change.

zul2805_es 7 / 18  
Sep 14, 2016   #2
Hi @Aris05, hereby I want to give you a feedback:

Original sentence:
The logging can generate the downside for the environment like pollution, habitat loss and climate change.

alternative sentence:
The logging can generate some of drawbacks to the circumstances, for instance it not only creates pollution and habitat loss but also causes climate change.

The downside = some of drawbacks
Environment = circumstances
Like = for instance

Avoiding shopping list could be much better. Instead of "pollution, habitat loss and climate change", You can alter it into "not only creates pollution and habitat loss but also causes climate change"
Wolf Larsen - / 127 47  
Sep 14, 2016   #3
Hello

Your text could be improved (stylistically) if you apply the following adjustments to it:

A great deal [...] The proper functioning of many industries depends on...
They need [...] After all, wood continues to be used for manufacturing different industrial products.
The logging [...] However, there are a number of downsides to the practice in question, such as...
Their leaves [...] help to prevent the soil's upper layer from being washed away when it rains.
The felling [...] The concerned practice also contributes towards harming...
When the erosion [...] Erosion results in causing the soil to absorb oxygen, which in turn reduces the amount of the latter in water.
maintains [...] keeps... hence, making it more likely for the acid rains to take place.
it contributes [...] makes it much more challenging for humanity to go about trying to reduce the emissions of carbon dioxide in the air, which in turn adds severity to the problem of climate change.

I hope this came of help. Regards.


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