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Logging industry needs supply from environment to deliver products which leads to the massive damage


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Sep 13, 2016   #1
IELTS Summary 1: Environmental Impacts of Logging

Fitting together, industry and environment nowadays become indivisible. Logging industry in particular, needs supply from environment to deliver products. Unfortunately, the logging brings the environment closer to massive damage. Environment such as rainforest is habitat and patron for the living thing.

The ecosystem of rainforest covers the soil from erosion. The root helps to protect the loss of fertile soil and trees have canopy branches to conserve the soil surface from heavy rainfall. Concerned with that, construction for logging accesses brought heavy compression on the land and endangers the water.

Logging industry activities inevitably had affected various areas. As a filter of the air pollutant, trees give myriads of advantages, but by cutting down the trees, it can lead to rain acid and climate change. In the water, eroding soil has disrupted the viability of aquatic organism. Thus, the logging industry should consider reforesting for environmental sake.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Sep 13, 2016   #2
Hi Dila.
Welcome to Essay Forum. I am delighted to tell you that you have been a right medium to improve your skill. Hopefully, you can harness this as well as possible. In this moment, let me help you to finalize your summary.


Logging industry in particular, needs supply from THE environment ...
THE Environment such as rainforest is ...

ITS REASON IS BECAUSE The root OF TREES helps to protect the loss of fertile soil ...
Concerned with that SUBSENQUENTLY, construction for logging accesses ...

As a filter of the air pollutant, THE trees give myriads of
... soil has disrupted the viability of AN aquatic organism.

Note: Dila, honestly, I appreciate your summary. This is free of major errors. It looks that you are very serious to enhance your ability. However, there were a few things which you are supposed to make it better. Harness linking words appropriately because those can help readers to understand your summary. The linking word can make your idea move to another topic smoothly. Following that, you have to be sure that what you write is what you mind.

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