In recent years, the advent of technology has significantly influenced to humans' life.
This claim has no direct relationship to the question and required discussion. It should not be present in the restatement nor opinion presentation. This is a personal opinion unrelated to the discussion requirement and will cause a lowering of the sectional score.
There are diverse reasons and effects have been expressed.
You fail to respond to the question. Provide a discussion outline in statement form. 1 or 2 topics for each. This will prove that you analyzed the qquestions and discussion requirements thus, boosting the score for this section.
The reasons and effects provided are plentiful but, these lack valid explanation development in the sense that it does not have proper examples and supporting explanations. The presentation is not cohesive enough to provide a convincing series of reasons.
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review punctuation usage rules. 2 cannot be used simultaneously. This in a grammar accuracy failure.