Unanswered [5]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width   Posts: 3


The map illustrate the transformation of the ground floor of a specific building from 1958 until now



tieuthanh 4 / 11  
Jul 26, 2023   #1

The plan shows how the ground floor of a building has changed over the time



The maps illustrate the transformation of the ground floor of a specific building from 1958 until now. Overall, the ground floor has changed to align with building's different purposes in three periods. Moreover, the number of rooms constructed has declined over the time.

In the west of the building, the office using this area from 1958 to 1984 erected three rooms which were meeting room, assistant's office and secretary's office respectively. Moreover, there was a toilet at the bottom left-hand corner. However, during 15 years since 1985, all the previous rooms on the left-hand side were replaced by two main rooms. The working rooms were removed to build a living room, and toilet was expanded for the purpose of bathroom and shower. From 2001 until now, with the appearance of a flower shop, while the bathroom and shower has turned into a play area, the living room has been reduced in size to give place to flower area and a gift cards.

In the east of the building, there were the kitchen, the manager office and the recception arena along the left corridor during 26 years until 1984. In the next stage, two bedrooms were constructed to replace the manager room and reception zone. Lastly, after being turned into a flower shop in 2001, although this shop has still remained the kitchen in the old region, the bedroom 2 has been removed to display flowers and an office has replaced the bedroom 1.

Can you comment on my thread and estimate its score? Thank you!


  • p1_th4ng1.png


Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15446  
Aug 2, 2023   #2
The presentation is too long for a 20 minute task. The aim of the test is to see how quickly you can compare and contrast the images presented within a short time frame. You have written 244 words, which may take you at least 40 minutes to write during the actual test. It will be best if you practice writing 195-200 words instead, regardless of the number of images you need to explain to the reader. While your representation is well developed and provided, you have not given yourself enough time to complete an accurate representation of the image within 20 minutes. This will end up an unfinished essay during the actual test. It is going to be best for you to write another essay, within the correct word count, so that I can better assess your ability to pass this test.
OP tieuthanh 4 / 11  
Aug 4, 2023   #3
@Holt
Thank you, I would write another essay and post it on website soon.


Home / Writing Feedback / The map illustrate the transformation of the ground floor of a specific building from 1958 until now
ⓘ Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms for professional help:

Best Writing Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳