Yes, raj is absolutely right! .... word count is very important for you to go for a good band. Follow that structure and you'll easily meet this requirement.
Personally, fundamentally I agree with the latter assertion.
.... As per the structure, this line should have been the last sentence of your introduction.
. Still, we can't deny the fact thateverypeople has their own freedom to study whatever they want and they have equal opportunities to do it.
This is the reason why you hold that opinion. So start the body paragraph with this reason. I find some grammar errors in this sentence.Pay attention to your grammar too;
all people have - "people" is a plural word , the you need to replace the words "every" and "has" with "all" and "have". Or else you can say like this;
every man has