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Modern technology is now very common in most work places. What do you think about it?



Blackpain 1 / -  
Apr 18, 2016   #1
Modern technology is now very common in work places. How do you think this changed the way we work? Do you think are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

Technology has highly evolved over times and it has become to integrated in different workplaces with a great aim of improving working conditions of employes and business managers.The use of technology at work simplifies the way of employees accomplis specific task at work.This developments and its ubiquitous availability yield could be positive and negative consequences in people lives.

There are many advantages of taking technology advancement in work places.One of them is that the easiest and controlled manufactures could be done by the latest technological machineries.For example, sixty years ago , car manufacturing has been controlled by manpower in contrast at that moment has been done by the technological devices.The second one being accepted to increase the aim of production rate as possible that keep in contact other producers to improve efficiency.

justooridoori 3 / 2  
Apr 18, 2016   #2
Today, Modern technology is now very common in work places. How do you think this changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages on relying too much on technology?

Technology has highly evolved over times and it has become to integrated in different workplaces with a great aim at improving working conditions of employee s and business managers.

... simplifies the way of employees accomplish specific tasks at work.Technological development and its ubiquitous availability yield could produce positive and negative consequences in people lives.

There are many advantages of taking technology advancement in work places.
... controlled by manpower in contrast at that moment has beennow it is done by the technological devices.
The second one being accepted to increase the aim of ...Please re-write this sentence.
justivy03 - / 2265  
Apr 19, 2016   #3
Hi Maria, I would like to share a few modifications to your essay.

- over times and it has
- become to integrated
- in different workplaces with
- improving the working
- conditions of employe es and
- way of employees accomplishing specific
- could become positive

- taking the technology
- advancement into work places.
- be done bywith the latest
- manpower, ( mind your punctuation mark )
- in contraston the contrary ( contrast - color / contrary - idea ) at that
- accepted is to increase

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