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Nha Trang - DESCRIBE A WELL-KNOWN DESTINATION YOU HAVE VISITED


lahoaithu 1 / 1  
Oct 16, 2018   #1

i was impressed by the capital of Khanh Hoa province



One of the most incredibly majestic destinations I have ever vacationed in the coastal city is Nha Trang, the capital of Khanh Hoa province. Located on South- Central coast of Vietnam, Nha Trang possesses the most picturesque seaside, prominent scuba diving service as well as yummy seafood, which attracts an inordinate number of international backpackers around the world.

Without a doubt, the most impressive thing about this "underrated pearl" is the pristine sun-drenched natural scenery. Nha Trang is surrounded on all three sides by mountain ranges. Therefore, I could have an opportunity to see high mountain peak floating in the soft cloud. My most memorable scene at this tranquil beach is the magnificent sunrise. I sacrificed one happy sleepy morning for a head for an early beach when the weather is chilly, the water is turquoise, the breeze is fresh. I strolled along the powdery white sand and dipped my toes in the cold water. All of these made my perfect day!

Together with the heavenly beaches, you can enjoy many activities on the beach such as swimming, sunbathing, building sand castles, playing volleyball. Moreover, Nha Trang is one of the best spots for scuba diving and snorkeling. Hence, I believe diverse fish and the colorful coral reef underwater will give you the most overwhelming feeling that you have never explored.

Additional, seafood is an absolute must try in Nha Trang. There are many mouthwatering and unique dishes; perhaps three ones you must try are "Banh canh cha ca" " Nem nuong Nha Trang" and "Bun ca sua". There is no shortage of restaurants to try these specialties as they can be found virtually everywhere in the city.

Ultimately, not only the exquisite landscape, but the hospitability of residents here as well as the delicious cuisine also contribute to making Nha Trang a dreamlike scene of nature! All of these appealing features make me yearn to come back here again and again!
sillyman2000 19 / 42 9  
Oct 16, 2018   #2
Well this is the best essay I've ever read with incredibly-impressive vocabulary (they are kinda derived from SAT language test) and wisely-utilized sentence structures. And yeah, I've been to Nha Trang like 4 years ago, and I share the same impression about this coastal city. The tranquility of the beach was what I enjoyed the most.

And as I saw your profile, you're an ULIS student, so it is no a suprise to me for an English gifted - Vietnamese student could acquire such a fascinating writing style like that. I wonder when I can attain this level of writing like yours.

Also, very tiny mistakes:
delicious cuisines also contribute
exquisite landscapes
terminal28 4 / 20 5  
Oct 16, 2018   #3
@lahoaithu

Perhaps you can consider beginning with a captivating description as your opening sentence. For example, " Picturesque seaside, prominent scuba diving service, yummy seafood and a pristine sun-drenched natural scenery are a fitting description of one of the most majestic destinations I have ever vacationed." That right away captures the attention of the reader already making me wish I was there.
OP lahoaithu 1 / 1  
Oct 16, 2018   #4
@sillyman2000
@terminal28
Thank you for taking your valuable time to read it ^^ thank you so much!
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Oct 17, 2018   #5
@lahoaithu I don't really find this essay interesting in a creative manner. You are just narrating your experience there, without involving the reader in the process. A really effective creative writing piece should involve the reader in the scenes and experiences rather than simply informing the reader as you do here. Take the reader on the adventure with you. Don't just give highlights of your trip. Be the tour guide. Liven it up. Be immersive instead of simply descriptive. There is a big difference between the two. The first one, creates a writer who knows how to use his imagination to engage the reader and the latter, simply knows how to write and describe things. I am convinced that you would rather be the former right? Next time, aim to be creative and involving rather than simply descriptive and informative.


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