Should the nonprofit community services be added to high school curriculum? IELTS Writing Task 2

compulsory unpaid community service

It's arguably that nonprofit community services should be added to highschool curriculum. Personally, I strongly agree with this opinion. The essay will discuss about how voluntary work could help student to develop soft skill and benefit the society

First, volunteer community service will benefit both the young and the community. If a large number of students doing unpaid work. By helping the elder, the sick or participating in certain public services like raising fund or environmental activities, et cetra. The young will gain a lot of valuable experience and become more socialble while the welfare burden on the state budget will be reduced.

More over, the student who has participated in community services often have the advantage over the student who don t have any experience. For example, when it comes to standard university or company often prefer student who has attend social service than those who don't.

However, there still some disadvantages if the young provide free serivec for society. For instance, it may bring a lot of conflict with there education routine. This may result in many undesirable effects like students couldn't keep up the school requirement in their education since the student have to spend a large amount of time to helping the community. Another vital point is that school is already causing significant stress and student need time to do other activities to relax and regain there strength and health.

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Firstly, be cautious of your usage of preposition or other forms of connecting words. For instance, in your first paragraph's last line, it should have been phrased as: "essay will discuss how voluntary work". Notice how necessary (despite how minute) these details are.

Don't deprive your readers of details, especially in your body paragraphs. Your second paragraph, for example, answer more in-depth questions here. How can the young truly benefit in these situations? How will the state budget be reduced here?

Try to not make bold statements without any firm details to back your information (ie. observe the third paragraph).

You need to balance out your conclusion with a short summation and a personal note on the topic.