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You will lose TA points for simply repeating the writing questions instead of creating a writer's opinion based upon short form reasons for the discussion. Create a problem statement or thesis statement for each reference point to receive points for the writer's opinion. You cannot receive scores for that section without these hypothetical statements.
The causes for the lack of STEM students is not well developed in the specific paragraph. While the reasons listed are numerous, the lack of properly explained reasons, and the interconnection between the reasons, have created a confusing statement of ideas. The reader will be confused about the presented information as these fail to interconnect with one another.
Considering the effects of the lack of interest, the explanation is better laid out than the reasons paragraph. So the 2 paragraphs will pull on the final score. Either you will pass or fail, depending upon the way the examiner views the lack of clarity in the reasoning paragraph.