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TASK 1 - NUMBER OF BOOKS READ BY MALE AND FEMALE; 2013 shown an interesting pattern



fijarakbar25 11 / 13  
Jan 18, 2016   #1
A breakdown of comparison among books read by people based on gender at the Public Library of Burnaby between 2011 and 2015, a 5-year period is presented in line graph. What stands out from the graph reveals that both figures show an upward trend along period in question. In the last two years, male read books more than female did.

Male category stood at almost 25000 while rate of female was twice higher than the first rate in the initial year. Both levels then rose significantly where the books read by woman increased as high of 8000 in the following year. Meanwhile another sex just read a half of female proportion.

However, 2013 shown an interesting pattern, both genders increased but crossed different path. Number of male went up drastically reaching a peak at 14,000 surprising category of female that suddenly jumped hitting low level at approximately 8000. After which, the gap between the two sexes was eventually far.

vangiespen - / 4077  
Jan 19, 2016   #2
Muhamad, try to increase the difficulty level of your English writing in your next practice essay. Your English usage in this particular essay is so average that your skills would be considered "beginner" at best. the fact that you do not know when you use connecting words adds to the problems of your writing skills. That is not the English written usage level that you want to portray as that will not land you a passing score in an actual test. aim for a moderately complex vocabulary next time.

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