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During 1995-2010, the number of international visitors in USA, Brazil, Egypt and Malaysia increased


Beauty17 56 / 88 5  
Nov 19, 2016   #1
A comparison of the number of foreigner visiting five different countries is shown in the line chart between 1995 and 2010 and it is measured in millions. Overall, the number of international visitors increased in those countries during this period and USA became the country with the highest number of worldwide tourist arrivals.

It can be seen that Brazil, Egypt and Malaysia had the same trends. Brazil and Egypt stood at below 10 millions in 1995 while Malaysia started two times higher than them in the same time. The number of travellers in Brazil and Egypt experienced same number in 1997. In the next years, people visited Egypt more than in Brazil until Egypt reached the greatest number of tourist arrivals at 20 millions in 2010. Meanwhile, the number of travellers visited Malaysia higher than Egypt and Brazil along these years and it achieved the top number at 50 millions in 2010.

Another country, France, had a significant increase by 60 million during 15 years. France experienced a dramatic rise from 30 to 60 millions in 2000. After that, it increased slightly to 65 millions in 2005 and raised the peak at 87 millions in 2010. On the other hand, USA witnessed a slight rise of 15 million from 1995 to 2010 and raised its highest number was 90 millions in 2006.




EditorPal - / 19 6  
Nov 19, 2016   #2
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... number of foreigners visiting five different ...

..., Egypt and Malaysia hadve the same trends. Brazil and Egypt stood at below 10 millions in 1995 while Malaysia started two times higher than them in the same time . The number of travell ers in Brazil and Egypt experienced same number in 1997.

... of tourist arrivals at 20 millions in 2010. Meanwhile, the number of travellers tovisited Malaysia higher than Egypt (...) and it achieved the top ...

Another country, France, had a significant increase by 60 million ...
... in 2005 and raised the peak at 87 millions in 2010.
... from 1995 to 2010 and raised its highest number was 90 millions in 2006.
nurainiyusuf16 47 / 83 6  
Nov 19, 2016   #3
Hello Beauty!
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... during this period and USA became the country ...

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In the next years, Egypt's visitors reached the greatest number of tourist arrivals at 20 millions in 2010 more than Brazil.

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