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A number of large cities with skyscrapers and shopping centres replacing small villages



nguyeneze7496 3 / 2  
Oct 8, 2016   #1
The advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community

Nowadays, there are a lot of changes quite clearly, a number of large cities with skyscrapers and shopping centres replace small villages with fields, grasses, little roads. Also many of young people convert lifestyle and come to these cities. So, in the past, living in a small community brought some advantages and disadvantages.

I think life in small town had plenty of advantages. Firstly, everyone knew everyone else so neighbourhood was closer and people would not feel lonely. Secondly, the atmosphere was really fresh and peace without duty smoke from factories or traffic jam which badly affected for inhabitant's heath and got them some diseases. Moreover, when being at a tiny town, people didn't not face so much pressure, they hardly took stress about jobs, family, relations as much as at a city because race of life there was slower. Also, living there was cheaper so they probably afforded many essential things due to the lower prices.

Besides, one of the drawbacks of living in small community was quality of life, people in there earned less money and had fewer conditions to enjoy modern goods. Education in schools was actually poor and lacked of studying materials or facilities such as internet was not widespread there. On the other hand, to study in high school and college, young people had to leave from their hometowns to nearest area or large cities. Also like that, adults came to downtowns for working because there were a lot of jobs in a developing city. As a result, the small town where only old people and baby lived was so boring.

All things considering, each person will have individual lifestyle. Grandparents generation would like to live a peace place as small town but dynamic younger generation always want to stay a large city. The most important thing is where people decide to live will actually bring them happy and convenient the most.

akbarmappiare 31 / 445  
Oct 9, 2016   #2
Hi..
Let me help you to finalize your essay. In this moment, I only focus on your contents of your essay.

living in a small community brought some advantages and disadvantages.

Purpose of writing the thesis statement is to describe your mind briefly. You should mention advantages and disadvantages which you will review, but you only write them through one or two words. It can help readers to get the points what you explain detailed in the body paragraph

I think life in small town had plenty of advantages

IN MY POINT OF VIEW, LIVING IN THE SMALL TOWN BRINGS A LARGE NUMBER OF ADVANTAGES.

Turning to the body paragraph, you actually have plenty ideas relating to the topic. However, you did not explain deeply. Keep in your mind that you can display the opinion but have to give supporting sentences. On condition that you don't., your opinions will seem like layman's opinion. Besides that, you should demonstrate concession in the last sentence each paragraph. It can illustrate the conclusion or consequent from all ideas.

people didn't not face so much pressure

you do not ever contraction in the formal writing. PEOPLE DID NOT

Besides

APART FROM THOSE, THERE ARE A FEW DETRIMENTAL EFFECTS
(You should harness linking words properly)

All things considering

IN CONCLUSION / TO CONCLUDE

to strengthen your conclusion, you should include a suggestion. That relates to the matter. It comes from the government, citizens or other elements.

Hopefully, these above can help you greatly.
GOOD LUCK


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