The number of people who usually travel by underground station in London from 6.00 to 22.00 per day

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London

The line chart illustrates the number of people who usually travel by underground station in London from 6.00 to 22.00 per day.
Overall, the time when the largest passengers use the underground station is 8.00, while 2 hours before having the least people work by underground station. Moreover, the data of travelers is a considerable fluctuation between 6.00 and 22.00.

To be specific, from 6.00 to 10.00, there is a slight fluctuation from 100 to 180 people. Moreover, at 8.00, people who commute by underground stations are the most crowded, at 400 people. Similarly, the figures of passengers experienced a gradual growth between 180 and 300 in 4 hours later.

However, the number of travelers has a dramatic decline from about 14.00 to 16.00, around 200 people. By contrast, people who work by the underground station at 8.00 a.m become more than 2 hours before, at 380 people. Nevertheless, 4 hours later, the rate of passengers witnessed a significant fluctuation from 380 to 140 people.

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The line chart illustrates the number of underground travellers in London ...
Overall, the peak time with the largest passengers is 8.00, 2 hours after the least figure for train commuters of the day is recorded. Moreover, the daily data of travelers undegoesconsiderable fluctuations during the whole day.

To be specific, 4 hours from the opening of the station at 6.00, there is a fluctuation from 100 to 180 people,with the number peaking at 400 people at 8.00. Similarly, the figures for passengers experiences a gradual growth of 120 until mid-noon.

However, there is a dramatic decline from 14.00 to 16.00 by around 200 people. This figure then overcomes a 380-people climb until 20.00, 4 hours before a significant fluctuation from 380 to 140 people is witnessed.

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In my opinion, you could use "passenger traffic" instead of "the number of people who..." to diversify your expressions.

The definition of 'passenger traffic' is as below. from Collins Dictionary.