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(IELTS) old building preserve or demolish?



ekekek 25 / 51  
Apr 8, 2011   #1
With the acceleration of economy, there is no denying that less land are available for new buildings. Confronted with the alternatives of preserving or demolishing the old buildings, some people support the latter. From my point of view, however, old buildings should be conserved due to their own irreplaceable values.

Buildings, as the emblem of culture heritage, witness the fast tempo development of society. Thanks to the old buildings, youngsters are able to touch the history directly. Take Chan Clan Academy for example, this historical building was preserved by one generation to another, making a great different to the one as Chen family's decedent. If without the old buildings, I could not imagine how blank and weak our history is.

Besides, old buildings contain plenty of memory to people, which could not be ignored. In China, Chinese think highly of the culture of family root. And the old buildings symbolizing the family root bear valuable memory among several generations. That's why, I suppose, most people take the old building as their heirloom, especially the elder. In other words, that sense of belonging couldn't be substituted no matter what reason it is. If the old buildings were demolished, endless void would occupy people's heart.

In addition, old buildings are a big amount of fortune for architect designers. Through studying the structure or style of the old buildings, specialties are capable to create more distinctive buildings. According to a report publishing on Chinese architecture website, it's said that 20% of the new buildings originate from the old ones. By collecting the preference of citizens, the figure indicates 76% citizens consider that the new buildings with traditional fashion are more attractive.

From analyzing above, it can be easily conclude that old buildings play an indispensible role in reflecting history, conserving memory as well as stimulating inspiration. Government should think twice before demolish the unique treasure -old buildings.

sobin 12 / 24  
Apr 9, 2011   #2
hi
i like ur essay..its a good one..
but according to me,it would be better than this if u could mention something about the drawbacks of preserving an old building;such as,expence,effort etc..the preservation of the old one also demands for new land for the new bulding..

:-)
biden - / 2  
Apr 9, 2011   #3
Katie,

Good vocab, and language is also persuasive and strong. I agree with Hafsa about essay.

Look forward for more writing samples and feedbacks.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Apr 10, 2011   #4
Here are a few ideas I'd like to share:

With the acceleration of economic development, there is no denying that less land is available for new buildings.
I'll show you when to use "is" and when to use "are" in this situation:
Less land is available.
Less money is available.
Less water is available.
Fewer resources are available.
Fewer scholarships are

Plural:
Buildings, as the emblems of...

Besides, old buildings contain plenty of memory sentimental value to people, which could not be ignored.

In addition, old buildings are a big amount of fortune important sources of inspiration for architects and other designers.
OP ekekek 25 / 51  
Apr 11, 2011   #5
thanks so much, gays~~
a piece of suggestion will be so important to me~~ ^0^


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