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Opinion about learn news through newspapers or other media


hominichan 1 / -  
Jul 24, 2022   #1

traditional newspapers or online media?



In recent years, the methods to receive information have been a topic of debate in many parts of the world. While I am convinced that reading newspapers benefits readers, I also believe that other media are effective to people.

On the one hand, although we are living in the age of the internet, newspapers are still a reliable source of information among readers. Firstly, newspapers always provided accurate information. Because, it is news sources of mainstream institutions, everything is censored before the information is published. Secondly, unlike newspapers, news on social media almost does not check which leads to providing incorrect information. That information distorts the reader's perceptions and makes confusion. That is exactly why people should stay alert to news online.

On the other hand, the undeniable fact that learning news through social media is more popular. In a digital world, people can read news very easily and faster. Everyone has internet connected devices like smartphone, tablet or laptop thus users just surf social networks or websites to read many news immediately. Besides, because newspaper's propagate slower, the information does not break news toward readers. To have one newspaper it has to go through many steps such as check, edit, censor and print before it comes to everyone. Therefore, getting updates through other media is one of the top priorities, especially among young people.

In conclusion, both newspapers and other media have advantages and disadvantages. Choosing the methods to receive news could depend on each person and the type of need.
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Jul 25, 2022   #2
The writer's discussion presentation does not follow the discussion requirements as originally stated. The first version indicated differening public opinions and a request to have the writer compare and contrast these opinions with his personal thoughts on the subject. The writer did not reflect these requirements in his prompt restatement + writer's opinion paragraph. Neither did he utilize the public v. personal comparison paragraphs in the reasoning presentation. The viewpoints are solely from a personal opinion, which does not offer a look into an opposing insight, thus allowing the reader to come to his own conclusion regarding the discussion. While the reasons presented are relevant and interesting to read about, the minute it did not use the correct discussion format, the essay already failed to get a passing score. Why? It only addressed one point of view where comparative public and personal POV's are required.
cherryblossom 6 / 11 3  
Jul 26, 2022   #3
You followed the format of a "discuss both views and give your own opinion" instead of a "to what extent" essay. And I think that's why it is not bold enough to convince readers and leave something of a long-lasting impression.

In this type of essay, I suggest you make the second body paragraph a counter-argument one if you want to make your essay stronger. But in this case in which you intend to write a balance essay, I think to emphasize your position using phrase like "partly agree" is essential as it makes clear and indicates that you are responding to the instruction.


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