Opinion are varied when it comes to the social media website

Opinion are varied when it comes to the social media website

Opinons are varied when it comes to the social media website. While some people belive that these sites bring people together in a benefitcial way, I would argue that social networking website such as Twitter or Facebook have a huge nagative affect on Juvenile and their ability to form personal relationships. Because of of abuse social networking and using websites with very high frequencies. I am a stronger avocated of the late idea.

On one hand, I understand why some people belive that these sites bring people together in a benefitcial way. This is due to the fact that social media websites are created for the purpose of connect people together. Especially during the time we're dealing with covid - 19, lots of places have been lockdown, hadly can we go out and meet everyone. In the meantime, social media is the best way for people to connect with each other, share stories or help, motivate each other. But also, because poeple spending too much time on social networking websites, which leads to negative effects on both physically, spiritually health.

Despite the bove explanation, I still side with those who belive that the social media website have nagative affects on Juvenile and their ability to form personal relationships. Frist, about heath We' ve been fascinated by social media, that lead to we stayed in frond of the screan and haven not noticed the time moving very fast. In the long run, this situation lead to eyes problems, Skeleton problem because We have not exercising we're just sitting frond of the scearn all day. Secondly, about relationships, which made up by the time we spent together, beeing able to talk, to meet each other and share a common things. Athough this can be done with social networking websides, but obviously seeing people in the real world, we can see them at both their best and their worst, which make us have a more specific view of our friend. In additions making online friends, we can lose the basic communication skills. Other than that, with people who we have known, we shared everythings online with each other, but this will be lead to we have nothing to say when we talk face to face.

This is one of the worst task 2 essays to have ever been written at this forum. It is not going to receive a passing score for several reasons. Listed without explanations yet, the reasons for a failing score will be lack of proper spelling, incorrect sentence structure, confusing thought presentations, and a lack of proper formatting.

Even though you wrote more than the required word count, the lack of proper formatting is a big issue for this essay. There are supposed to be 4 paragraphs at least for each task 2 essay. The paragraphs should be representative of:

1. A paraphrase and writer's opinion
2. First reasoning explanation
3. Second reasoning explanation
4. Summary conclusion

This essay represents only 3 out of 4 requirements, thus making it an incorrectly formatted paper.

Spelling is also a problem in this essay as the writer did not take care to try and spell even the most common English word correctly. The word is "Beneficial" not


. This spelling error was repeated several times throughout the presentation which indicates that the writer did not spellcheck his work before submission or, that his English vocabulary is so lacking, he knows what word he wants to use, but does not know how to spell it.

The summary overview is confusing. Are you referring to social media as the website or social media usage? Those are two different topics for discussion. The reason behind the discussion is also not clear. What sort of essay is the writer composing? Is this an extent essay? Or is it a simple agree or disagree essay? The communication of the opinion needs clarity.

Majority of the sentences are difficult to understand. It is obvious that the writer is translating his native language word for word to English rather than thinking and writing in English. This poses a problem as it creates confusing references and is difficult for a native English speaker to understand. It will definitely lead to a failing C+C and GRA score.

Then there is the problem of incorrect capitalization and punctuation usage. I am afraid the writer does not understand or have a background of English grammar and writing rules which led to this high incorrect and definitely failing essay. While I will commend his effort in writing the paper, the efforts he took failed to meet the writing requirements for a passing score.

I hope to see you do a better job next time. You show the potential to address these task prompts properly. You just need to work on your sentence formation, word and punctuation usage, as well as thought clarity. Do not just keep writing for the sake of writing. A long essay will not pass the test when you did nothing correctly in the presentation to deserve a passing sectional score that would add up to an overall passing score. Write aiming for quality of work, not word quantity.

Please be careful with your typos such as"Frist-First" , "covid - 19 - COVID-19", "hadly-hardly", "belive- believe" and etc....

Afterof + V_ing
For example. in your essay you write "...are created for the purpose of connect people together."
-> "...are created for the purpose of connecting people."