Some people think that teachers at school are more responsible for children's intellectual and social development than parents. To what extend do you agree or dis agree? What is your personal opinion?
As more priority is given to education on the current status quo, some people arrive at a consensus that instructors at school are more crucial for strengthening kids' intelligence and social contact than their parents because the time dedicated to schooling is more than ever before.
To large extent, I oppose the viewpoint and regard parents as the most momentous teachers despite not best.
For starter, parents are their first teachers who play a paramount role in moulding kids' characters, particularly in childhood, as well as have the power to determine educational things (e.g. which school the child will attend, whether hire a tutor), while the educators only assign some tasks and impart some knowledge.
Moreover, throughout children's educational "careers", a child has to study a wide spectrum of curriculum, resulting that a large number of teachers will teach him or her compared with parents who will influence him or her all the time. What is more, educators always have too many students to pay equal attention to every student as well as ignore someone's particular demands. As the main purpose to attend school is to grasp knowledge, the educator might just cram children knowledge passively and mechanically. In comparison, parents who do not know the realistic knowledge might inspire their children to study, which could make kids acquire the most vital skills- learning- to lead successful lives during the 21st century.
On comparison, parents are superior to the teachers in terms of development of their children's intelligence and social interaction.
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