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Many people across the globe are consuming an exorbitant amount of sugar-based beverages

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Aug 26, 2023   #1

More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this?

It is an undeniable fact that an alarmingly high number of individuals across the globe are consuming an exorbitant amount of sugar-based beverages. This issue is deeply rooted in various factors and therefore requires immediate action.

One of the primary reasons behind the widespread consumption of sugar beverages like soft drinks, sports drinks or tea is the manipulative content in their advertisements. Companies such as Coca-Cola and Pepsi are guilty of using these commercials to influence people, especially children, into believing that drinking their products will make them popular, resulting in a surge of people consuming these drinks.

Additionally, the presence of chemicals like caffeine and sugar in these beverages provides consumers with a refreshing and energizing boost, leading them to indulge in them repeatedly to satisfy their cravings. This, in turn, can result in addiction, obesity, diabetes, and circulatory disorders. For example, in the United States, there is a survey that is collecting information about the percentage of people who have diseases caused by sugar drinks and the results from the survey show that there a numerous people who consume sugar beverages are obese, have type 2 diabetes and having circulatory disease.

Thankfully, there are several measures that can be implemented to tackle this critical issue. One such solution is for the government to increase taxes on sugar beverages, making them more expensive and discouraging consumers from buying them. Another effective approach to this problem is health organizations and governments must work together on advertising campaigns that highlight the detrimental effects of consuming too many sugar-based drinks and provide viable solutions to this problem. As a result, this will affect these consumers who are addicted to sugar drinks to stop consuming or to lower their intake.

In conclusion, while there are multiple reasons behind the over-consumption of sugar-based beverages, it is crucial to take immediate action to mitigate the situation and reduce the number of people consuming these drinks.
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Sep 12, 2023   #2
When asked to discuss the reasons for a problem, the assumption of the examiner is that you shall be discussing 2 related reasons, that will create a fully developed paragraph. Use one paragraph for the reasons and another for the solutions. Each paragraph must make accurate use of transition sentences rather than transition words. In this case, you should have connected the 2 reasons in one paragraph instead of 2 individual ones. Although the discussion was good, it lost points because the none combined discussion resulted in one paragraph being less developed than the next. For full scoring based on proper discussion development, use the format I have indicated. You clearly have knowledge based on the topic provided, so the problem in relation to a lowered score will come from the discussion presentation format.

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