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Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose


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Apr 2, 2022   #1
Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose. Others believe that it is merely a distraction from real life.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.



In this time and age, it is more accessible to approach Art in various ways. While some argue that Art is one of the sources providing the goal and meaning of lives, it is believed by others that it may put humans in the illusion from reality.

Arts help people to survive. Hard times or obstacles are inevitable throughout our lives. To overcome those difficulties, arts are some tools to save you from the deep end of dwelling. Arts can be performed in a wide variety of ways, in which humans experience different feelings in the process. Take music as an example, some light music can lift you up and boost your mood. Painting is another example to illustrate, which is a method to express your heart and intrinsic thought. During the creation of Arts, people can be triggered to think in another, or even entirely different perspective, which instead is creating the meaning of life.

On the contrary, some may hold the view that Arts are a waste of time. Enjoying Arts, not to say creating them, is time-consuming and may cost a lot. Some people, the underprivileged in particular, lead a hectic life to make a living. They could barely support and maintain their daily life by busy work, let alone enjoy the additional entertainments like Arts, namely, visiting gallery or exhibition to understand the message that the creator or composer delivers, or purchase different tools to create their own art pieces.

In my point of view, Arts differ significantly between people from all walks of life. It depends on your capability and wealthiness. After all, money provides humans with the freedom and space to escape from reality in the form of Arts. Thus, I believe that Arts are a kind of distraction of life, but in a good way if you are wealthy enough.
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Apr 2, 2022   #2
It will be better for the exam taker to avoid using memorized and exaggerated phrases such as "In this time and age". There is no reason for this statement to be present in the paragraph because it does not have any bearing on the actual topic. Connecting this phrase with the original statement was certainly an ineffective stretch on the part of the writer.

Now, while the writer does provide a pretty much accurate restatement of the original topics, the missing personal opinion left the prompt restatement + personal opinion paragraph incomplete in terms of response format. The writer should make sure that he accomplishes all the task requirements for the first paragraph at all times.

The writer has provided good discussion paragraphs. The problem, is that the writer forgot to write up a proper concluding summary for the essay, thus forcing a failing score due to the lack of a closing statement. The essay was good, but incorrectly formatted. A personal opinion is not acceptable as a concluding presentation.


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