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IELTS ESSAY; Some people believe that cell phones should be for personal use only



devabe2005 46 / 96  
Jul 24, 2014   #1
In this technological world, for better communication cell phones are inevitable in everyone's life. Some people reckon that cell phone should be used for personal purpose only while others think that it should be used for work. This essay intends to analyse both the views in detail.

On the one hand, cell phones are useful to keep in touch with long distant family members, relatives and friends. Though it has advantages, call from colleague from office at midnight for discussing office work interrupt night sleep of the person and his family. Moreover, if a person uses cell phone for office purpose like interacting with client and talk about office work with team member would cost more for mobile bill which he has to pay. This will result in both financial and mental stress for a person.

On the other hand, cell phones are used in office to do client interaction to get better sales. Mobiles are used to inform permission and leave to the higher authority in office. It is used to communicate from one branch to other branch employees of a company. Although, cell phones have advantages, sometimes family members or friends may interrupt the work through unwanted calls and messages. Furthermore, advertisement calls, donation related calls would affect the work of an employee and he cannot complete his work due to disturbance of the cell phone.

To conclude, by analyzing both the views it is clear that in both personal and office limited use of mobile phone is necessary. In my point of view, restricted use of mobile phones both at home and work would bring success, stress free life for a person. In addition, balance use of cell phone at home and in office is mandatory to cope up with personal activities and office work.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Jul 24, 2014   #2
This essay intends to analyse both the views in detail.

even this essay opens for discussion/ both views. It is nicer if you end this introduction by stating your clear statement.

To conclude, by analyzing both the views( I think this part adds no value. Therefore, I omit it) it is clear that in both personal and office limited use of mobile phone is necessary.

a person uses cell phone for office purpose like interacting with client and talkS


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