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Some people believe that films should have educational value, others claim that they just entertain


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Dec 11, 2020   #1

Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain



In modern society, people are suffering from a lot of pressure at their workplace and school. There are varying views regarding the way to entertain and overcome stress. It is true that some people think that watching films should be just for entertainment benefits. However, others consider films should educate and bring various meaningful value. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the latter statement.

On the one hand, there is no denying that people always watch movies as a recreational activity. There are genres of films to relieve stress such as comedy or action movies. These kinds of movies can make laugh, motivate their minds and escape them from the pressure. "Home alone", for example, is a comedy classic for entertainment purpose. It not only makes funny vide, but also helps audiences forget all the stress from the daily grind.

On the other hand, although the purpose of films is to entertain, there are many advantages that films bring for us like educational value. Firstly, historical movies like "Titanic",... help audiences understand more about the past. Throughout this kind of movie, people, especially the youth can learn about history faster than reading events in history books. Secondly, watching movies helps people learn foreign languages because they can hear foreigners' pronounces and intimate the way the characters use their words.

In conclusion, there is no doubt about the purpose of watching films is to relax, films play a significant role in teaching people educational values. I strongly believe that people watch films for different purposes like understanding the cultural countries as well as broadening their knowledge.
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Dec 12, 2020   #2
Accuracy is the name of the game when presenting the prompt paraphrase. You are unnecessarily including information not included in the original prompt. Additional information reference based on your own opinion does not need to be presented in that section. It should only be a complete and authoritative paraphrase of the original presentation. The first first 2 sentence are unnecessary. The reference to "It is true.." is also additional, unsupported information that should not be in the presentation as it is not included as a reference point or question in the original presentation. These errors shall pull down your TA score. The paraphrase should only include 4 sentences:

Sentence 1: Topic
Sentence 2: First point of view
Sentence 3: Second point of view
Sentence 4: Personal opinion

Notice that every sentence presented is in reference to the original prompt, without additional information. That is how the paraphrase is developed.

The overall presentation you have used in the reasoning discussion is also incorrect as these only refer to your point of view, without a comparison to the public point of view presented previously. You must present your opinion at the end of each reasoning paragraph based on the public point of view presentation. Do you agree or disagree with it? Explain. That is how the reasoning paragraphs work.

By the way, you cannot use a comma and an ellipse at the same time. You may use only one punctuation mark at a time because each punctuation mark as a specific function in a given sentence presentation. The comma, means there is information to follow, the ellipses is used to indicate missing piece of text, or allows for a pause in writing. An ellipses is only used in creative writing to express hesitation, changes of mood, suspense, or thoughts trailing off. None of which exist in your sentence presentation.


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