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People should be more independent from modern technologies to protect their ability to think


ajulyav 1 / -  
Jan 29, 2016   #1
As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

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People should be more independent from modern technologies, because they can influence negatively on the ability to think.
Today a real problem is that a lot of people cannot remember dates, names or addresses. Moreover, it is known that the yong use their phones and special applications to save important events in to-do lists. If to take into account that people did not use any technologies a few years ago, it is possible to say that they could keep in their heads more information than today's people.

Furthermore, to rely on technology in everyday life can be the main reason, why it is getting more difficult to calculate numbers without using programmes.Researchers show that more than fifty percent of students in High Schools face a problem of calculating numbers in mind.

But it would be unfair to say that technologies have only negative affect on people's life.
A lot of research works are based on big massiv of information.
For instance, such field as Big Data is very popular nowadays. The analysis of this field can help to find answers on many actual problems, for example, changing the climate on Earth, prediction various situations, calculating previous data. It would not be possible to calculate these tasks without using computers.

To summary, technologies are becoming an integral part of human life, more and more people rely on them. But many of people do not even think, that excessive using of everyday gadgets and applications can be a real problem, because it deteriorate the ability of humans to think for themselves.
nguyenvannam 5 / 11  
Jan 30, 2016   #2
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irhame 52 / 50 25  
Jan 30, 2016   #3
Hello ajulyav

Given task requires to what extent do you agree or disagree. It means that you should give your position on it agree or disagree because it is the predominant requirement in this essay. Furthermore, i sadly say that your writing is unsystematic essay. Then, your introduction and conclusion are too short. Next, you should take into consideration of your subject verb agreement.

This is some corrections from me


People should be more independent from modern technologies, because they can influence negatively on the ability to think.

In this era, people rely too much on up-to-date technologies. On account of this, some argue that it will negatively influence in the way they life such as hard to remember. While it is true, i totally disagree with this notion since they can help human to answer a wide range of actual problems.

To conclude, while many believe that using modern technologies can influence negatively for people's life such as easy to forget, i certainly disagree for this opinion as people are helped to solve many problems by operating these technologies.


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