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Ielts Writing - people should pay tribute to the artificial intelligence - pros and cons of AI



red roses 1 / -  
Nov 29, 2020   #1

Artificial Intelligence - Ielts Writing



Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

In the modern age, the deployment of artificial intelligence in various fields is becoming ubiquitous, which has recently sparked bitter controversies revolving around its potential impacts on humans. In this essay, the two opposing views will be discussed.

To commence with, it is apparent that the narrow AIs praiseworthily offer a plethora of benefits. Firstly, they pave the way for certain economic sectors to thrive. With commendable speed and level of accuracy, not only do they produce better results but also reduce the likelihood of errors. For instance, robots perform surgical procedures with greater concentration as well as precision compared to a human doctor. Secondly, that the application of AIs enables people to set foot in inhabitable areas is undeniable. Indeed, unprecedented research in outer space or the depth of the ocean is conducted on a regular basis, continuously expanding the horizons of contemporary civilization.

On the other hand, artificial intelligence utility poses a threat to the life of the populace. Elements presaging a shift in the labour market are witnessed. Should they continue to replace the human workforce in a range of realms from manual occupations to professional ones, a grim outlook for the local inhabitants will be painted. Specifically, they are inclined to get redundant due to being dwarfed by intangible counterparts. Blue-collar workers are clear case in point in the context of industrial revolutions 4.0. Furthermore, doubts are cast on personal as well as national security. It is widely argued that villains have AIs as a vehicle to exploit valuable information in order to blackmail or serve political purposes.

To recapitulate, in spite of existing disapprobation of their unlimited capabilities, I hold the firm belief that people should pay tribute to artificial intelligence. Moreover, individuals can make use of AIs to facilitate life on the condition that they can adapt to changing situations.

lobodobo 2 / 4  
Nov 29, 2020   #2
This is a very well written essay but at least in my opinion, you should give another paragraph with its pro's. Because right now, you have given pro's and cons equal emphasis and are suddenly supporting AI in the last paragraph. I would like to see what experts like Holt think about this though.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15357  
Nov 29, 2020   #3
Where is the personal opinion? Did you mean that the overall discussion was based solely on your personal opinion? If so, then your essay has already failed the test. You were required to offer a personal opinion of each point of view. That means you have to present a balanced presentation composed of the popular opinion explanation, then your personal point of view. The way you presented the essay, the only reference point is the general discussion. So, the essay is not presented in the appropriate discussion slant. You will only get a partial score for this essay due to the missing section in relation to the personal opinion.
baotram1812 6 / 11  
Nov 29, 2020   #4
Hi, your essay is pretty good, but I found an error.
- that the application of AIs that enables people ... areas is undeniable.


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