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The People Perspectives to Others by Their Clothes Wear


SarlindaDS_27 42 / 52 5  
Nov 3, 2016   #1
Writing Task 2 IELTS (Cambridge IELTS book Unit 8D page 52)

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


Nowadays, the innovations of fashion styles have rapidly changed, Every people as a part of fashions marketing targets certainly have any perspectives for their outfit looks. The fashion styles of people are depending on their favorable fashion trends. But, the judges of others who seeing the people by his covers seemingly have contradictive views.

Firstly, based on people views that have given evaluations the person just by his clothes. There are many people who have typically like this and usually use this way to giving interpretations for other social groups. Ordinary people who have narrow perspectives often use some attributes of the person as tools for makes classification states. They had made the standard criteria for separated people class by their fashion styles. For example, the society that come from high economic class have been identified by their clothes styles that includes any luxury or branded things, such as branded clothes, luxurious watches, original leather things, branded shoes and another high-level class things and this standard automatically applied towards them with lower class background as their measurement social class. Even though this way is not usually ensured people real backgrounds but it has affected many people perspectives today.

On the other hand, secondly, views come from the people who have the contrary perspective or disagree with the statement and have a principle for never judge people by his covers. Actually, the people who have opinions like this usually wiser than others and also have a wider perspective than generals in giving a label or a judge towards other. For instance, they do not directly judge the people by his outfit looks but outweigh giving evaluations from the people personality characters. However, they probably do not look people in their luxury dresses, casual clothes, originals branded or imitation brands that people wear before known the people personality and the clothes is not tools for them measure other personalities.

To sum up, every people have difference views depend on their standard criteria in judging people by clothes wear. However, the appearance of people from outside is not always shown their exact personalities.

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AhmadNashran 9 / 13 1  
Nov 3, 2016   #2
Hi Sarlinda. here I have some suggestion for your writing

... have rapidly changed,. Every people as a part of fashions marketing targets ...

... person as tools for makesing classification states

... the standard of criteria for separated the people's class by ...

the society that comes from high economic class havecan been identified by their clothes styles that includes any luxury or branded thingsproduct , such as branded clothes, (...) another high-level class thingsgoods and this standard automatically ...
nurainiyusuf16 47 / 83 6  
Nov 4, 2016   #3
Hellooooo Sarlinda!
Allow me to give you some suggestion.

Nowadays, the innovations of fashion styles have rapidly changed,

Nowadays, the innovations of fashion styles have changed rapidly.
Change -> verb
Rapidly -> Adverb
Verb+adverb


Nowadays, the innovations of fashion styles have rapidly changed, Every people ...

I guess that it is not clear introduction paragraph sarlinda :)
Look at the prompt below:

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Those are three keyword which you should put in your introduction. At least, you have to mention them.
It will better to put your statement here. It helps you to answer the prompt about your own opinion.
Please kindly to check example that I have put below.

At present, the way people look and their dress become an identity for them. Some people argue the fabrics that people wear is the most important indication of what they are like. Due to people who use a suit cloth is seen as an executive while people who use casual clothes is judged as less education people. Others say that it is not fair to judge people by the way they look. Personally, I believe that people clothing is one way to predict how people do like but it is not the best

I found a good flow in your body paragraph. Keep practice.

Hope it helps you, keep writing honey :)


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