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Nowadays, most people would purchase ready-made food than cook at home.


Cherry may 2 / 4  
Jul 20, 2019   #1

Convenience food pros and cons



These days, most of the people have grown up on a diet of convenience food particularly in ready-made food instead of cooking at home. They claimed that they don't have enough time to cook meals at home as they are struggling with their education purposes or business matters. However, these ready-made food might lead to be harmful to our health. In this essay, I will discuss why the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

To begin with, one of the main disadvantages of purchasing ready-made food is that it can cause various diseases and health problems. The more pre-prepared meals you eat, the more likely to suffer diseases such as obesity, diabetes and heart diseases. Most of them often contain too much salt, sugar and fat. Moreover, it might lead to get serious diseases even cancer as they are treated with some chemicals in order to be long-lasting.

Furthermore, the most important thing is that no one can know how these food are produced. Sometimes, they are manufactured in some industries which are in unhygienic condition or environment. Some of the companies just follow the trends of profit rather than providing better food quality. They might use some dangerous chemicals or things to get better taste or smell. That's why it is impossible to believe these meals' qualities comparing to the cooked meals at home.

However, there are also some advantages of buying ready-made food. They are so cheap to buy and easy to be available. It also saves time, money and energy as we don't need to put an effort to cook meals.

In conclusion, it is clear that food plays an important role in everyone's life. Diet is relatively linked with human's health. In my opinion, eating ready-made food make us get serious health problems and chronic diseases even though they provide some positive sides. That's why disadvantages outweigh any advantages.
DarthPhaedr 1 / 2 2  
Jul 21, 2019   #2
Hey, very good transitions and well-structured paragraphs!!

I would suggest choosing either "our" or "they" in your essay and not use both:

"They claimed that they don't have enough time ... to be harmful to our health".

Avoid "I", instead, use:

In This essay, I will discuss why ...

Also just a few suggestions on the wording of some lines:

They are so cheap to buy and easy to be available. It also saves time, money ... - Food that is prior made is cheaper and have a more convenient availability than home-cooked meals. Ready-made food also saves time, money and energy as most people don't feel like putting the effort to cook meals.

Hope this helped :)))

@DarthPhaedr
Maria - / 1,098 389  
Jul 21, 2019   #3
@Cherry may
Hello there. I'll provide you with writing feedback on your writing to assist you in this process.

Firstly, try to focus on improving the clarity of your language. For instance, instead of mentioning that something is for "educational purposes", try to just mention that people are often too busy with nonpersonal affairs to give sufficient time for cooking. If you can have this more striaghtforward approach to writing, you'll be able to curate meaningful sentences. This will help you trim down your writing - at the same time, you'll be able to focus more on prioritizing content that you truly need in the long-term.

Furthermore, I would improve the structure of your conclusion. You can create this portion with a smoother flow if you can transition in between your sentences with more intention.

Best of luck.
OP Cherry may 2 / 4  
Jul 21, 2019   #4
@DarthPhaedr
Thank you so much for your suggestion. It is really helpful to me !!

@Maria
Thank you so much !!


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