People say that you can learn more about a different place just by watching TV

Question:

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

Answer :

In the past, only certain people can journey abroad to other countries. Particularly, just rich people who have much money to spent for visited some beauty countries. As we know, there are various countries in the world and have many thews such as culture, food, languange, building, and many more. Recently, many programs on tv shows about journey to many countries in the world. The program can caused everyone imagined about circumstance of life in other country.

Therefore, journey programs nowadays became one of the most popular program on tv. It can changed perspective which making someone thought to prefer stay at home and just take information from tv or internet to know about something, like many places in outside the country and prevented curiousity to observed or learnt about culture and many things in other country.

Furthermore, in my view unfamiliar place which we dont't know before is good for visit. Because it can improved our knowledge and open our mind to the world. When we visited the new place and saw directly in there is different when we just watched that on tv. We can interacted with the local people, met many new friends and feel the atmosphere.

In conclusion, It's good for you to get much information from tv or internet about some interesting place in other countries. Eventough, perhaps you know about that, but you also to feel that directly, because is very diverse when you just see on tv than you try to visit it.

Alfin, you should have presented a personal opinion in your opening paragraph. The reason for this is that the prompt is asking you a pointed question that requires a direct answer in the opening statement. The personal opinion that you present in that paragraph should be the basis of the overall discussion of your essay. Aside from that missing element, your opening statement is acceptable enough. By the way, good job on coming in at exactly 250 words. That said, you can revise some portions in order to better reflect your personal opinion at the start of the essay. As I said, that is a requirement of the prompt so it should be reflected in your work.

By the way, be careful with your formatting. You accidentally have 2 paragraphs stuck to each other in this essay. Be sure to clearly separate the discussions using the enter key alright? It is best to always be sure that the reader will not be stressed when reading your essay.

In terms of discussion, the essay is acceptable and presents a good discussion of the topic. Your point of view, which is clearly represented in the paragraph, shows that you understand the background of the prompt and you know exactly how to powerfully discuss the topic. Your conclusion though, needs another sentence in order to meet the essay format requirements. You can create the new sentence by dividing the discussion points in the single long sentence within the paragraph into 2 topic sentences instead.