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Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


These days, healthy lifestyle has become a trend among most of inhabitants. What kind of food they eat, how many time they go to gym and what yoga course they take are being concerned mostly by the majority of citizens. Thus, this new trend eventually lead them to a healthy life even though another group of people find it is still difficult to be run.

Many people assume that healthy lifestyle means improving lifestyle cost. Consuming oorganic food, for instance, is something that is considered asa luxury. Besides, bad habit like consuming junk food which has been being done by most people also takes big role of the reason why live healthy life is difficult. Nevertheless, I am convinced that it is not hard to live healthy lifestyle as long as the subject itself has a strong willing for it.

On the other hand, some societies find it easy beacuse they only need to be discipline to live healthy life. Exercise, taking some rest, and balanced diet are the main points that build healthy lifestyle, I think. People do not need to go to gym to do exercise, even walking pass some metres around office to find a restaurant in break time can be counted as an exercise. It is as simple as that.

All in all, it seems that the intention determines ifhealthy lifestyle is difficult or easy to be run. Either he/she is busy or not, they first thing should be questioned is how far someone wants a healthy lifestyle.

bismillah 15 / 29 1  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
hi friend i have some suggestions for your essay

how many times
Consuming o organic

bad habit is like consuming
like has to meaning are verb and adjective

some societies find it easil y

i hope it can help you
good luck
Giansy11 18 / 32 5  
Sep 27, 2016   #3
Hi Hujjatul..
i have no doubt that you are great in writing, but lemme give you some corrections.

... and what yoga course they take are being concerned (double verb)

... lead them to have a healthy life even though ...

Consuming oorganic organic food, for instance (where? ), is something... (make it clear) that is considered as a luxury.
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Sep 27, 2016   #4
Hi Husnul, I have a few remarks for your concluding paragraph.

Conclusion

- All inOver all, it seems
- that the intention determines ifdetermination to have a healthy lifestyle is difficult
- Either he/she is busy or not, theyway, the first
- thing to be done should be questioned
- is, how far can someone
- wants ago for a healthy lifestyle.

There you have it Husnul, I concentrated on the last paragraph on your essay as I believe that this is the part that needs improvement. Overall, you made quiet a strong and well managed essay, you made sure that all the necessary points are covered and you highlighted the facts following your claims on being healthy and living a healthy lifestyle. I believe that, indeed, with all the choices we have in choosing our diet, it's a struggle to eat and choose a healthy diet and at the end of the day, the choice we make is the person we become.

I hope the insights and remarks help in your revision and should you need further assistance, do let us know and we will be here for you.
Ucha MSN 17 / 26 4  
Sep 28, 2016   #5
These days NOWADAYS, healthy lifestyle has become ...
... eventually lead them to HAVE a healthy life even though (...) difficult to be run DONE.

Either he/she is THEY ARE busy or not, they THE first thing THEY should be questioned ...
Ifan21 22 / 24 2  
Sep 28, 2016   #6
Hallo Hajjatul
These following correction are suggested for your writing :

... become a a trend IN SOCIETY trend among most of inhabitants . What kind of food they eat, how many time OFTEN they go to gym and what yoga course they take are being concerned BY THEM mostly by the majority of citizens .

... though another group of people find it is still difficult to be run (Sound littlebit awkward ).

... means increase improving lifestyle cost. Consuming o organic food, for instance, it is something that is considered asa luxury food.
Nevertheless, I am convinced that it is not hard to live healthy lifestyle as long as the subject itself having a strong willing for it.

... discipline to live healthylife . Exercise, taking some rest, and balanced diet are the main points that build healthy lifestyle, I think.

Note:
Please bear on your mind about miss spelling, and sentence cohrency, avoid repetition,


Thanks
Best Regard
Ifan21


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