Some people think that parents should teach children ; INTRODUCTION

Topic: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Education is one of the major factor that directly impact on being good member of society. While some people think it is the duty of parents to teach children to be good at society others believe that schools are fully responsible for this but I personally think it is both parents and schools duty to teach children how to be good in society.

Topic: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Education is one of the major factor that directly impact on being good member of society. While some people think it is the duty of parents to teach children to be good at society others believe that schools are fully responsible for this but I personally think it is both parents and schools duty to teach children how to be good in society.

you're just rephrasing the prompt. redo.

what is the best way to teacher our younger generation has become a controversial issue among the society. some people believe that parents hold major responsibility, while others think that schools should be responsible for that. however, my view is that both schools and parents should share the educational responsibility together.

Education is one of the major factor that directly impact on beinga person becoming a good member of society. ... a good hook


This is fine.... you introduce the argument.... But you should have stopped at this point.


This one should be a new line in which you express your view. You follow the right structure for the introduction and that means you should earn a good score on intro :)