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How does people use water in Gulf Countries? Here is the answer


Yusuf05 11 / 14 2  
Sep 2, 2016   #1
Hello everyone!
If you do not mind to spend a minute, please look at my following IELTS Task practice.


The table gives information on how six gulf countries consume water for the different purposes in 2000 and is measured in the percentage. It is noticeable that, with the exception of Kuwait, all countries consume water predominantly for agriculture and it is followed with domestic need, while water use far less for industrial.

With the regards to the volume of water use for farming, both Saudi Arabia and Oman had the highest use of water, range at a very large majority. Accounting for a slightly lower amount of use was Bahrain and Kuwait just under a fifth and nearly two-fifths respectively.

Turning to the second biggest use was in the field of domestic, Kuwait, spent the highest consumption, stood at 63% and followed by Bahrain with a large proportion of use. Interestingly though, Saudi Arabia and Oman had particularly high levels for agriculture, both of these countries crawled at a small proportion. The median domestic consumption was UAE at 35% and Qatar at 30%.

Finally, water used for industrial by all gulf countries was a tiny proportion, the exception being Kuwait at just under 20%.

Please note me as well, whether the writing has covered the most significant information or not.
Thanks in advance




akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Sep 2, 2016   #2
Hi Mr. Yusuf.
Let me help you a few suggestions to boost your score.
Good Luck.


It is noticeable that, with the exception of Kuwait, all countries consume ...
OVERALL, IT CAN BE SEEN THAT OMAN AND SAUDI ARABIA HARNESSED THE WATER AT ALMOoST AS MUCH AS ALMOST THE SAME PROPORTION FOR THREE SECTORS. IN ANY CASE, WHILE THE DOMESTIC WAS PRIORITIZED BY BAHRAIN AND KUWAIT FOR SUPPLYING THE WATER, OTHER COUNTRIES TENDED TO USE THE WATER TO SUPPORT THE AGRICULTURE.

Yusuf, keep in your mind you are supposed to have more than 3 sentences in each paragraph. Besides that, if you wanna reach the high score, you have to be brave to compare the figures clearly. One of task achievements is how you make comparisons amongst the relevant figures
ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Sep 3, 2016   #3
... six gulf countries consumed water for the different purposes in 2000 and is measured in the percentage.

It is noticeable that, with the exception of Kuwait, all countries consumed water predominantly for agriculture and it iswas followed with domestic need, while water used far less for industrial.

well, actually it is a good essay. However, you should notice some point:
- time signal in the diagram because it has affected on tenses you use in your essay.
- give paraphrase sentence from the question and avoid the repetitive words
Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Sep 3, 2016   #4
hi....

It is noticeable that, with the exception ...

Overall, it can be seen that/it is noticeable that ...

Pleace mention your overall because it is important thing to answer the question

six gulf countries consumed water for the different purposes in 2000 and is measured in the percentage.
Faridadwi18 67 / 104 13  
Sep 3, 2016   #5
Hi Yusuf,

- ... all countries consumeD water predominantly for agriculture and it iswas followed with (...) water useD far less for industrial.
- Accounting for a slightly lower amount of use was Bahrain ...

Hopefully it helps.


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