Percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test

the passing rate of driving test

The graph illustrates the proportion of Asian males and females getting licensed in their driving test between 1980 and 2010.
While the figure for passing rate in driving tests fluctuated over the period surveyed, it is evidentially obvious that women got licensed more than men all the time, and the gap in statistics stabilized at around 20%.

The statistics for females succeeding driving exam has its start at approximately 48% and that of males was 28%. In the next twenty years, the ratio of the two genders went upwards continually and both had their peak at 68% for women and 49% for male.

However, the year 2010 witnessed a small drop in the percentage of women getting drivers license from 68 to only 63 over 100 people surveyed. For male test-takers, the statistics didn't have any remarkable changes since its peak in 2000 and remained at a standstill with 49 over 100 men getting licensed

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statistics stabilized at around 20%. Better not to use numbers in overview

had their peak at around 68%

from around 68 to only 63 over 100 people surveyed.
peak in 2000 and remained at

The organization, vocabulary and clarity is good. Good luck

@SaraOm thank you so much