The percentage of young people in the UK who choose to eat vegetarian diet over the past fifty years

IELTS Writing Task 1: UK adolescents following vegetarian diet

The graph illustrates the significant variation in the percentage of young people in the UK who choose to eat vegetarian diet over the past fifty years. It can be seen that the number of young people in UK who had vegetarian diets decreased after 1980 until the year 2000. Overall, the graph shows two main periods of interest in vegetarianism among adolescents in the UK: one peaking on 1980 and the second projected to peak approximately thirty years later in 2012.

In 1960, only a small percentage of adolescents (about 1 per cent) were vegetarian and followed by a steep increase until 1980 when it reached to over 15% which was the highest percentage of adolescents having vegetarian meals in the UK. Thereafter, it kept on declining with minor fluctuations until the year 2000 when it got a very small number. After 2000, this percentage gradually increased until nearly 2011 at above one in ten. It remained steady for the next following years and it is forecasted than that will remain almost same until 2020.

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