People generally think that if they have a job and they are earning good enough then they have achieved everything. But the most important thing everyone forgets is that they actually like where they are working. Or are they happy with their work. One must consider that working only would not give you everything; it's working at a place where you actually enjoy your work and have pleasure in pursuing the same. The people have made a perception towards it that if they are earning good then they are happy. But it is not the same. What happiness would you get if you have to do a job in which you do not get interest in. None. But if you work at a place where you love to do what has been given to you gives you joy which no one can define. What could be more delightful than working on something for which you are passionate. I find it really amusing to work on something of which I am capable of and not just do it for the sake of it completion. Working at a place which helps you earn better gives you satisfaction but working somewhere you enjoy the work gives you pleasantness. Supposedly if an engineer is asked to work in a bank or if a doctor is asked to repair a machine then they probably would not relish the tasks given to them. A person can only be pleased if he is functional where he belongs to. It's the pleasance of mind one gets when he has what he had hoped-for. So in my belief a person can only be happy if he has got a job which he enjoy rather than working at a place where he earns a lot because in the end it's the self-felicitousness that matters.
Well for the first part you have repeated your ideas too much.
Try to write brief but informative will you? You only went around the bush on how working in a dislike environment doesn't give you pleasure and how working in a place you enjoy give you pleasure, no explanation or things. So it will make the readers kinda bored :) Hope this will help :)
By the way remember to include the type of task you are doing so that it would be easier for us to assess :)
thank you for notifying me. i am actually new to this & trying to get a hold of it. i appreciate your assessment & will surely try to improve myself... :)
thank you once again!! :)
It is always good to include the purpose of writing , e.g. IELTS, TOEFL etc., in your title for the others to provide you with more meaningful and task related feedbacks. Also include the full prompt in your post too and that will help us understand what it really requires from you.
ut the most important thing everyone forgets is that they actually like
where they are working.the work they do.