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Petrol price increase and its impact on traffic & pollution levels


scarlet_bouquet 1 / 6  
Apr 9, 2012   #1
This is my first essay uploaded. I feel it a little too long for a test but I did not know how to cut it down. I hope that you all could help and give me your feedback and correction for my writing. Thank you.

Question: Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

My essay:

The question of how to tackle the growing of traffic congestion and pollution remains a controversial one. Solving these problems is likely to need more than a simple rise in the price of petrol.

The idea of driving up fuel cost could be considered as a solution for the problems. In order to limit the effect of fuel cost increasing, people might choose between: to limit their travel activities, or to consider alternative saving transport means such as public transportation, thereby partially solve the problem. However, I find it hard to completely agree with the idea that the solution is the best one for heavy traffic and pollution problems for long. The reason is vary; one is that the both two choices would not drastically change the total demand for travel. People only can afford to limit their "extra-curricular activities" which is not much and cannot reduce the demand for required activities such as work or education etc. which is the main demand and they also would not use public transportation as an alternative one due to its quality and quantity are currently not meet the needs and the convenience of the passengers. Secondly, escalating the gasoline price would also increase input costs of wide ranges of enterprises that relies on petroleum either in their production processes or delivery stages; which in turn lead to the rising sale price of products. Products with same quality but higher price together with the pressure of higher transportation cost would affect the consumer to buy fewer products and definitely it would not encourage enterprises to expand their production which eventually might harm the economy and in a worsen circumstance it could lead to an economic crisis.

There are also other more effective measures to be considered such as properly re-dividing lanes in cities, charging additional fee on transportation traveling during rush hours in some heavy traffic roads, encourage people to use clean-power-using vehicles etc. Moreover, it is also required a serious consideration for long-term solutions. Everybody knows that along with economic development, the explosion of transports as a need for development is inevitable. Therefore, solutions for long could be to focus on forecasting the needs of transportation in order to build appropriate plan for infrastructure construction, invest in cleaner fuels or fuel-saving vehicle R&D (Research and Development) activities, making strict standards for vehicle production, adopt more environmental friendly materials and producing equipments, relocate population in cities etc.

In conclusion, heavy traffic and pollution is the common problems of any developing countries. To solve it, it required combination efforts from individuals and governments; prudence and consistency in implementation.

hales 1 / 3  
Apr 10, 2012   #2
The vocabularies are quite divers and language organization is impressive, but the writer should improve his logic connections and organizations
OP scarlet_bouquet 1 / 6  
Apr 12, 2012   #3
Hi hales,

Secondly, escalating the gasoline price would also increase input costs of wide ranges of enterprises that relies on petroleum either in their production processes or delivery stages; which in turn lead to the rising sale price of products. Products with same quality but higher price together with the pressure of higher transportation cost would affect the consumer to buy fewer products and definitely it would not encourage enterprises to expand their production which eventually might harm the economy and in a worsen circumstance it could lead to an economic crisis. (A little bit off-track in above paragraph, as the main topic is to solve traffic problems and pollution issues, but you are talking about now the economical harm

My plan is to first answer the question of what extent that i agree with and my reasons for it, and then to give out my suggestions of other measures for the problem.

In the first paragraph, i give out my opinion that I agreed with the idea that petrol price increasing could be a solution for the problem however it not the best one and definitely cannot be used for long period of time, the 2 reasons for it was given after that. The second one for price lifting not to be the good solution is that it will raise input costs in many enterprises and consequently lead to the situation as bad as economic crisis. It've mention cisis problem in my essay just for strengthening the view that higher price can't be the best solution.

(This paragraph does mention the other measures, butit does not prove increasing petrol price is not the best solution. maybe they are all good, but increasing petrol pricing is the best among them; I think you many need to state more about it )

As mentioned above, I am not totally agree with the price increasing solution and the reason was listed in the first paragraph, The second one is use for giving some suggestions only. Maybe my idea wasn't done clearly and convincingly enough then made you a little confuse?? I currently don't know how to improve it :(.

Thank you for your comment.
OP scarlet_bouquet 1 / 6  
Apr 13, 2012   #4
Hi all,

I feel that many sentences in the essay were much too long and not "sharp" enough but i didn't know how to improve it.

Could anyone have any suggestion for my essay?

Your comments are highly welcome.
xyx0905 16 / 49  
Apr 14, 2012   #5
Hi Scarlet_bouquet,

I give you my attempt (a while ago)

This is no doubt that traffic and pollution from vehicles have become huge problems, both in cities and on motorways everywhere. Solving these problems is likely to need more than a simple rise in the price of petrol. 38

While it is undeniable that private car use is one of the main causes of the increase in traffic and pollution, higher fuel costs are unlikely to limit the number of drivers for long. As this policy would also affect the cost of public transport, it would be very unpopular with everyone who needs to travel on the roads. But there are vapours other measures that could be implemented that would have a hug effect on these problem. 78

I think to tackle the problem of pollution; cleaner fuels need to be developed. The technology is already available to produce electric cars that would be both quieter and cleaner to use. Persuading manufacturers and travellers to adopt this new technology would be a more effective strategy for improving air quality, especially in cities. 53

However, traffic congestion will not be solved by changing the type of private vehicle people can use. To do this, we need to improve the choice of public transport services available to the end-users. For example, if sufficient sky trains and underground rail system were built and effectively maintained in our major cities, then traffic on the roads would be dramatically reduced. Long-distance train and coach services should be made attractive and affordable alternatives to driving your own car for long journeys. 81

In conclusion, I think that long-term traffic and pollution reductions would depend on educating people to use public transport more, and on governments using its funds to construct and run efficient systems. 33 / 283


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