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Question: The illustration shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures show the conventional manufactured chocolate production. Overall, there are 10 stages linear process in total, and it is a man-made with cacao trees being grown in several countries as the beginning and liquid chocolate produced by pressing the inner part as the ending.
At first, the process starts with cacao trees being grown in places such as South America, Africa, and Indonesia. The pods are ready to be harvested when these are ripe. After being harvested, the white cocoa beans are removed from the pods to be fermented. The fermented beans, then, are exposed to the sun for a certain period of time. These beans are packed in large sacks after being dried.
Transporting the sacks by trains or lorries is the next step in the production for them to be taken to the factories. In this place, the beans are roasted before being crushed and the outer shells being removed. The chocolate production ends with pressing the inner part to produce the liquid chocolate.
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Question: The illustration shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures show the conventional manufactured chocolate production. Overall, there are 10 stages linear process in total, and it is a man-made with cacao trees being grown in several countries as the beginning and liquid chocolate produced by pressing the inner part as the ending.
At first, the process starts with cacao trees being grown in places such as South America, Africa, and Indonesia. The pods are ready to be harvested when these are ripe. After being harvested, the white cocoa beans are removed from the pods to be fermented. The fermented beans, then, are exposed to the sun for a certain period of time. These beans are packed in large sacks after being dried.
Transporting the sacks by trains or lorries is the next step in the production for them to be taken to the factories. In this place, the beans are roasted before being crushed and the outer shells being removed. The chocolate production ends with pressing the inner part to produce the liquid chocolate.
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