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The popularity of telecommuting and tele-learning



Anna Ho 1 / 1  
Jul 6, 2021   #1

nowadays people often work and study remotely



Nowadays, we are living in an ever-changing world with technological advancement. The prevalence of wifi and the consistently decreasing price of laptops or smartphones have made it easier for people of all income levels to work remotely. In my opinion, this is a positive development for students and workers alike.

On the one hand, there are some reservations when it comes to the rising popularity of telecommuting and del e-learning. While some proponents supporting this view suggest that the constant distractions associated with social media are only more pervasive when a student does not have his or her tutor to keep them on task. In addition, the majority of employers and managers are concerned about privacy risks. Companies depend on their intellectual property and information is kept confidential. If the information is compromised because of the worker's insistence on remote work, then both the employer and employee could be in jeopardy.

On the other hand, the rise in distance learning courses and remote work has its merits. First of all, the most prominent of classes or workplaces which are conducted electronically is their flexibility. Distance learning allows students to acquire knowledge at a much lower cost and reduces the barrier to entry for many people. Moreover, their laptop and virtual learning freedom let them prioritize their assignments that need the most effort. Secondly, the challenges of raising children, staying on top of bills, and spending time with family and friends are alleviated when workers are not required to commute long distances. As a result, employees can seamlessly go from working on a project online to picking up their children from school without issues.

In conclusion, although there has been some minor concern about the security risks and freedom, I believe tech-based work life is a positive development that has become more common.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15446  
Jul 7, 2021   #2
The restatement + opinion statement is well developed. The response provided is concise which made this an effective opening /introduction paragraph. However, the 2 reasoning paragraphs do not properly support the opinion. This is the part that may cause a failing mark ffor the presentation. The reasoning discussion in support of the opinion should have done the following over 2 paragraphs:

Sentence 1 - Present some information about working from home / learn from home that could not be done without computer technology.
Sentence 2 - Explain how computer tech made it possible
Sentence 3 - Give an example of the positive effect
Sentence 4 - support the sample with an additional explanation
Sentence 5 - Transition to topic 2

Do not merge the discussion points for both topics. That makes the information confusing. Use one highlight for each in a stand alone paragraph.


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