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The population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults. good or bad?


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Oct 19, 2017   #1
At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

the challenges of population aging



In today's world, there are countries that the percentage of young adults is more than elderlies. The question of whether it is a positive or negative thing is a controversial one. I will discuss this issue and present some examples and talk about the effects of it to the country.

From one had, the higher number of youth in a country means more people are available for work. Obviously, every country needs workers and professionals for developing. There are some countries whose citizen's average age is retired, therefore they have to accept migrants to solve their lack of working labor problem.

Another angle is health care system. When a country's most population become old, they need special treatments for their health as well, so the government needs to pay a lot of money to build or maintain hospitals and prepare proper health insurance.

On the other hand, the older people gained a lot of experience in their life and it would be a shame if countries don't use their skills. While training new employees is a hard and expensive process, the elders already know how to get the job done perfectly.

In conclusion, while it's awful for a country to loos all their experienced people, every country still needs working labor for progress. In overall it is a good thing if the number of youth increases in a country, meanwhile elders are also valuable and younger people can receive advice them, also companies can use their experience to train new employees.

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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,697 3502  
Oct 20, 2017   #2
This sort of essay, based upon your title heading, indicates that you are to pick only one side of the discussion for development in your presentation. Either having more young adults in a population is good or bad. Pick one side and defend within 3 paragraphs in the body of your essay prior to your conclusion but after the introduction. So the paraphrase for this essay should have been:

As the number of young adults in some countries continue to grow, the aging population begins to number less in the overall count. At the moment, there is a focus on the discussion as to whether or not this development is a good or bad thing. In this essay, I will be presenting my singular opinion on the matter based upon examples and reasons that I am familiar with.

The only time that you do not use a singular opinion discussion in an essay is when you are specifically asked to discuss "both points of view". In this essay, you are given a choice of topic to discuss. By developing your discussion based on only one opinion, you have the ability to present a fully understandable and well supported discussion that could increase your final score in all band considerations.


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