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It is now possible for scientist and tourist to travel remote natural environment eg. the south pole


Ummu 4 / 6 2  
Oct 19, 2017   #1
It is now possible for scientist and tourist to travel remote natural environment such us the south pole
What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

Tourist and Natural Environment



Presently, travel to the rural area not as impossible as in the past. Many tripper even scientist can be easy to visit those region. By this condition there is merit and demerit that possibly happen and will explain clearly in this essay.

Travelling now have become one of great lifestyle by some people. It such an important necessity to visit unique place which is usually in the rustic area. Unfortunately some visitor lack of knowledge about the place that will be visiting and also lack of preparation for the journey, as the impact those traveler will get problem both in terms of health and equipment. i believe do travelling in the rural area is not just bring our self and imagine the spectacular scenery and spectacular picture that will get, but the more important is how all the fittings already manage well.

In addition, do travelling in the suburb area makes any impact to the environment, it clearly seen what happen in Everest since it can visit by tripper who do hiking there. People now are free to do what they want to do without take any attention to the environment. While there are so much mortal that should be preserve

To sum up, travel should be prepare well before the journey begin, because good preparation will lead to the good condition also. I personally believe that traveling to the rural is good but we should also keep our environment

Hannielee 1 / 3  
Oct 19, 2017   #2
Hi Ummu,
1. Many tripper even scientist ... => this should be plural. And It's better to use "these" than "those" in our essay. Morover, "Even" should be used in the situation of un-common, weird thing. My suggestion: "Many trippers included both tourist and scientist can be easy to visit these regions"

2. Travelling now have become ... => wrong verb and unclear structure. => "Travelling becomes a great lifestyle of some people, nowadays".

3. In addition, do travelling in ... => "Additionally, Visitors may cause many heavy impacts to the environment in these suburb areas" => try to not confirm 100% in the essay, you better to use "may", "can", "be able to"... to mention your ideas/ predictions/ opinions. Only write direct verb/ confirmation for 100% true things. :)

3. I think there are a lot of grammar errors such as plural, singular, and words using. Please carefully check. Goodluck :)
Holt - / 7,530 2001  
Oct 19, 2017   #3
Ummu, the difficulty in understanding your presentation and the lack of cohesive and coherent paragraphs have led me to believe that your score for this essay will not be higher than a 3. You do not express a clear position on the discussion, and your ideas remain underdeveloped due to your difficulty in presenting your opinions and thoughts on the matter in the English language. You have an extremely limited ability to portray cohesive devices in your sentence development which left you with highly limited control over your word formation when it came to sentence presentation. There are simply too many grammatical errors and sentence structure problems in your essay for it to be considered for a score higher than the one that I gave you. You must go back and study how to form simple English sentences, learn how to properly do that, and then practice writing simple sentences before you try to write another practice test. That is because I doubt, based upon your current skills that simply writing the practice tests will help you improve your skills. You need basic training before on to advanced English language training.


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