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I prefer to live in small town, big city is terrible and have much pollution



ridwan 8 / 16  
Mar 28, 2014   #1
Some people prefer to live in small town, others prefer to live in big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Everybody says to wish a life comfort and peace. Some of people say about living in a small town more too, but all of people say live in the big city more comfort and peace than inhabit in a small city. Why have people expectation occupy in the big city? The reason is on job field, big entrepreneurship opportunity. Actually big city is terrible and much pollution. I prefer living in a small town, because it is a little pollution and community friendly. Small city not only does not pollution, but also its much opportunity to entrepreneurship.

Society is friendly in a small city, they life based on to help one another. Otherwise live on the small town always near with neighbors, because they honor each another neighbor. For example, Bogor is a small town and it society is friendly because Buintenzorg of people always honor to another person. To help neighbors an person become habit usually does it in Ramadhan. Its is clearly that live in a small town is happy. So, inhabit in the big city is different because people always busy in the big city and they do not know each neighbor.

Jakarta which is metropolis has big pollution and it has a street of busy. It is the reason what I do not like living in the big city. Reside in a small town is not pollution because a small town seldom any vehicle. For example, Some of people Kediri use a bicycle for their activity such as they go to school, go to office, and they go to market always use a bicycle. It example clearly that people use bicycle in Kediri to decrease pollution. So, small town has polluted more a less than big city.

It conclusion that live in a small town is more comfortable than big city because small town has society friendly and the pollution is more a less than big city.

Pahan 1 / 1824  
Mar 28, 2014   #2
Everybody saysto wishes a life with comfort and peace.

... or you can say;
Everybody wishes to live a comfortable and peaceful life.
Some of people say aboutprefer living in a small town more too , but all ofsome people saychoose to live in the big city due tomore comfort and peace than inhabit in a small city.convenience and opportunities.

You need to do lots of practicing because you have to improve a lot on grammar and vocabulary. Do not try to use big words at this point of time. Use simple words and make sure you write sentences that are free of grammatical errors. With practice you can keep improving :)
OP ridwan 8 / 16  
Mar 29, 2014   #3
Thank you Mr. Pahan for your comment.

i will practice and continue to struggle.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 30, 2014   #4
Good editing by Pahan :) Let me also help you with a few more sentences;

Society is friendly in a small city, they life based on to help one another

... very good point. But you need to present it more clearly;
In a small time, the people are closer to each other because of their high dependency on one another.

Otherwise live on theliving in a small town always near with neighbors, because they honor each another neighborwould not be easy because they have limited resources compared to city life.


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