IELTS Task 1: Process of Making Chewing Gum

The diagram below shows How chewing gum is made.

Turning to the chart indicates the process of making gum which is the detail steps from melting the raw material to package the product.

First in all, the pieces of gum are poured into a container and are heated until the pieces of gum are melting to be the single form of mass. Moreover, straining of the melting gum is the next step to extract the dough more smoothly. Next, the gum is placed into another container and is added with the flavoring, softeners and sweeteners. This mixture is blended until all of the ingredients are mixed together.

Moving onto the next step the gum is delivered into the different machine which uses rollers to flatten out the gum. When the gum has been thin sheets, they travel to the cutting machine which cuts the gum into rectangular shapes and is broken into the single piece. Finally, the gum comes to along a conveyor belt for packaging process and ready for distribution.

Clearly, the chewing gum process, which has six steps, is connected with each other step in the gum's factory to create the various flavors. A more detailed look at the picture depicts the process of making gum and the ingredients are required.

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..."diagram" is a more appropriate term for this case.
The diagrams present the production process of chewing gum .


This should have been shifted to a new para ( I have suggested you an approach for this task and I think this line fits better with "overview" part)


this shape is strained

I think you already managed your paragraph well, but try to show the differences between one paragraph and others more clearly.

the immediately
don't put 'the' before adverb

Sheets of gums is grouped based
be careful with singular and plural

packaging should be doing by human
learn more about how to compose passive sentence

to distribute and blowing for reduce your stress.
you should write distribute and blow for reducing your stress
be careful when you use 'and' to connect two verbs,,they should be balance

Thank you Dumi and Fikri. I will be paying more attention about my grammar

which one is correct, fikri
In the last, chewing gum later on ready to distribute and blow for reducing your stress.
In the last, chewing gum later on ready to distribute and blow for reduce your stress.

ok sekar,
I suggest you to use the first sentence

In the last, chewing gum later on ready to distribute and blow for reducing your stress.

would you give me the explanation fikri, why "reducing" is preferable than "reduce" in this sentence?

ok sister,,when you use 'reduce' you shoould replace 'for' with 'to'
because for is usually followed by verb-ing
and to is usually followed by verb 1

Let me conclude
for + ving
to + v1

In the last, chewing gum later on ready to distribute and blow for reducing your stress.
In the last, chewing gum later on ready to distribute and blow to reduce your stress

is it correct ?

yup,,but don't forget to pay attention with the context of the sentene

sentence bro :D

be peruse...

sip, I will...