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IELTS: Public libraries, learning materials, and limited resources on Video, DVD


welnorze 8 / 15  
Jul 12, 2012   #1
The main purpose of public libraries should be to provide books. Public libraries should not spend their limited resources on computer software, videos or DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the development of information technology, lots of public libraries have various electronic learning materials such as software and videos accessible to the public. However, in order to save resources, some people argue that the original function of public libraries - only provide books - should not be changed. From my perspective, I totally disagree with this idea and will prove it with evidence.

Firstly, the materials that public libraries provided should not be restricted to books as reading is only one of various ways that people can acquire knowledge. For example, in order to illustrate knowledge vividly and make learning more interesting, the official journal 'National Geography' has made hundreds of videos relevant to the topics in its paper magazines and developed computer programs which enable people to search knowledge of geography online quickly and easily. Since the public libraries is an organized collection of resources made accessible to the public for reference or borrowing, all kinds of ways to acquire new information and knowledge including reading, watching and hearing should be enabled by providing both physical and digital materials.

Secondly, electronic learning materials will not demand much for the budget public libraries. Since e-books and videos provided in public libraries are stored in the database of library which can only be modified by librarians via computers, the cost brought by damage and stealing on these kinds of materials can be ignored. In addition, although libraries need to spend money on purchasing some copyrighted softwares like Microsoft Office Suite in the beginning, the future use and update of those softwares are totally free. Last but not least, the electronic storage of information is a clearly space-saving option for the public libraries. For example, the size of a DVD is much smaller than that of a normal sized paper book, however the data capacity of the former is hundreds of times bigger than the latter.

In conclusion, in my opinion, public libraries should provide all kinds of learning materials to the public and enable various kinds of approaches available for people to acquire knowledge since the contribution of modern learning styles and materials both the public and libraries is much more than their real cost.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 14, 2012   #2
Your grammar is good. Vocabulary too... The only problem is your sentences tend to be too lengthy so that reader has to remember everything you said in that sentence. The more you make reader's life easy, the more you can impress him. So try not to write too long sentences.

Good luck!
: )
OP welnorze 8 / 15  
Jul 14, 2012   #3
Thanks dumi. I always try to make the sentence longer because i thought complex sentences worth more mark....:(
Obviously, i am totally wrong. The main problem now is that, i do not know the proper size of a sentences which could be accepted by readers....:(

I hope someone could give me examples...
Thank you very much.. :)
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 14, 2012   #4
Hi Chun,

In my view, what is more important is to impress the reader and in your case, the examiner. In this regard the clarity of conveying your ideas is very important. The more you lengthen, the more you confuse the reader. :D

You don't have to write very short sentences. But do not combine different ideas in one sentence. That demands the reader to remember what you said earlier and that's more work for the reader. He would surely not like it. :D

However, you write well... my suggestion is just to improve your writing skills :)


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