TASK 1 - RADIO AND TV; the proportion of the audiences in the UK of radio and TV throughout the day

TASK 1 ABOUT RADIO AND TV

The line graph compares the proportion of the audiences in the UK of radio and television throughout the day from October to December in the year of 1992 .

It is clear that most people in the UK prefer to listen to the radio at morning and watch the television at dinner time, while the rates showed almost equal percent at the middle of the day and night.

In 1992, about 8% of residents in the UK turned up the radio to start the day, the rates saw a rapid rose to 28% arrived at the peak around 8.30 am, while some individuals chosen to open the television at approximately 7% when having the breakfast. At the moon, a general decline can be witnessed in the listeners of the radio until the midnight. By contrast, although the rates of television audiences experienced some fluctuations, a dramatic increase provided by the people opt for watching television.

Before the 2 p.m, the rates of the audiences overtook the listeners of the radio at 25% and saw a shape growth reaching the peak at 47% at 8 p.m. Compere to the stable decease of the radio listeners, the proportion of the television showed a surge decline from 43% to 3% stood at the similar amounts of the radio at the end of the period.

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You are misinforming the reader about the image information. You are using the terms morning and dinner time, when the graph refers to noon and midnight. The examiner cannot give you a passing TA score when you have 2 violations indicated:

- Wrong image information reference
- Run-on Sentence presentation instead of individual sentence information sections

Yes, the information starts at 6 AM. However, the image is asking you to take note of the comparison usage times between noon and midnight. These highlight points should have been properly indicated in the summary overview. These should have been used to represent the trending statement, at the very least.

You are not paying attention to your word usage and word accuracy either. The essay shows clear evidence of careless writing and disinterest in increasing your LR, GRA, and C+C scores. There are several wrong word usage presentations that will decrease the GRA and LR scores specifically. (Hint: There is a big difference in the meaning of moon and noon. Which one was indicated in the image?) Do not assume that your draft essay is the final version. You should take at least 5 minutes to review your essay and correct the errors that you should be able to spot on your own.