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Rainforests are a vital natural supply with widespread biodiversity and inimitable. Logging danger.


naelendra 6 / 10 3  
Oct 10, 2016   #1
Enviromental Impact of Logging

Paper product made from plant, material product prepare by logging industry send by shipping to Logging manufacturer send by shipping to customer. Effect from climate change also change ecosystem and many activity form our earth. Consequence of Logging spread out there just the felling ecosystem they are also terrestrial and aquatic.

With forest still protect soil beneath and lives , damages from illegal logging also take erosion . a lot of example consequence from the damages, excessively factor connection with soil damages a considerable part from development facilities. Another damages from logging is aquatic habitats. With removing plant it make much disadvantages. Rainforest also give oxygen to shield from air pollution..forest also retain from damages ecosystem. Several logging corporations also injury huge territory of forest unbiased to facilitate access to one area a practice that releases level additional carbon dioxide.

Rainforests are a vital natural supply with widespread biodiversity and inimitable. Further accountable logging rehearsal would help guarantee that they are endangered for future compeers.
TJLuschen - / 241 203  
Oct 10, 2016   #2
Hi, I am afraid your essay was very confusing for me. I think if you had a clearer structure and a formal introduction with a specific thesis statement, it would be easier for the reader to follow your ideas. You sort of jump from topic to topic without any transition phrases. Here are some more specific suggestions: (too much copy-paste = removed )
elasyari93 2 / 5  
Oct 10, 2016   #3
Hello @naelendra, I got some suggestions for your writing.

1. Paper product made from plant, material product prepare by logging industry ...(It looks so confuse to see S and V agreement)

2. The effects of climate change ...

3 . A lot of example consequence ...

4. Another damages from logging ...
Afdhel 14 / 21 1  
Oct 10, 2016   #4
Hi naelendra, I want to give you some suggestions

The Effect from climate change also ...

Paper product is made from plant, ...

many activities form our earth

Actually, this sentence makes the reader become confuse

Another damages from logging is aquatic habitats

The Consequence of Logging spread out

Please, learn grammar deeply. Based on your essas, appartently you do not know many rules about grammar

Keep writing, Good luck
ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Oct 10, 2016   #5
Paper product made from plant, material product prepare by logging industry send by shipping to Logging manufacturer send by shipping to customer.
i am really sorry to say that this sentence does not make a sense
you should pay attention to the subject-verb agreement

Effect from climate change also change ecosystem and many activity form our earth.
i would like to re-write this sentence=> Climate change also has affected ecosystem and many activity kind of lives form ourin our Earth .

Consequence of Logging spread out there just the felling ecosystem they are also terrestrial and aquatic.
Consequently, logging spreads out and damages terrestrial and aquatic ecosystems.


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