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In recent years, the structure of a family and the role of its members are gradually changing.



thaoly2007 4 / 6  
Jul 8, 2023   #1
In recent years, the structure of a family and the rold of its members are gradually changing.

What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?



In the past years decades, the structure of a family and the responsibility of its members are greatly altering. There are some important changes that have taken place and I believe that these changes would have both benefits and drawbacks

In nuclear families, nowadays, fathers' and mothers' roles are the same. Unlike in the past, when men were breadwinners, who decided all the things in their house, by contrast, women were mostly housewives and they had to do chores and obey their husbands. In today's society, housework is divided equally so that males and females can spend time creating their own career paths. In the family structure, recently, couples are not only boys and girls but also two girls or two boys. Moreover, many modern families choose not to have children.

These changes have a load of effects on various parts of our society. In so doing, with the support of gender equality, women's pressure has been declining significantly. They turn out to be the well-rounded version of themselves, an independent person, as they can do whatever they want, earn their own money, etc. New family structures help young people enjoy their whole lives with their partners. They don't have to suffer from prejudice anymore. Furthermore, not having kids families makes young people reduce their pressure as they can spend time traveling, working, and so on. Nonetheless, this craze for not giving birth causes a population decrease as well as a lack of employees in the future, which is one of the problems that most developed countries try to tackle.

By and large, these changes can bring both a wealth of positive and negative influences on many aspects of life.


Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15385  
Jul 10, 2023   #2
While the essay meets the word count and the discussion does relate to family matters as indicated in the original prompt, the problem of the essay lies in the presentation itself. This is only a draft copy that was submitted for evaluation / grading at this point. You should never submit the paper as soon as you complete writing it. You have to review what you wrote for coherence and cohesiveness. This is where the paper actually fell apart in the scoring stage. Your presentation is too scatter brained. The discussion is choppy and lacking in actual cohesive substance between topic presentations. It is not good to write under developed ideas. Your presentation will not receive a good C+C score, which is a major scoring section that could actually help you to pass or make you fail the test. In this case, you failed.


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