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TED resume : The happy secret to better work



Beauty17 56 / 79  
Aug 16, 2016   #1
In science of happiness, external world is predictive of happiness levels. 10% of long term happiness can predict by external world and the remains in predicted not by the external world but by the way of brain processes the world. Based on the previous research, only 25% of job successes are predicted by IQ. 75% of job successes are predicted by optimism levels, social support and ability to see stress as a challenge instead of as a threat.

Most of people nowadays have being outlined all the negative things that can happen but not talked about the positive. For example the absence of disease is not health. Actually, the point is how to get to health not about the absence of disease . It is need to reverse the formula for happiness and success. Most companies and schools follow a formula for success which is this : " If i work harder, i will be more successful and if i am more successful that i will be happier". If happiness is on the opposite side of success, the brain never gets there. People have pushed happiness over the cognitive horizon as a society, it's because they think they have to be successful then they will be happier.

However, brains work in the opposite order. If someone can raise other person's level of positivity in the present, then their brain experiences call a happiness advantage, which is brain at positive performs significantly better than at negative, neutral, or stressed. Intelligence rises, creativity rises, energy level rise. Brain at positive is 31% more productive than brain at negative, neutral, or stressed, because dopamine which floods into system when person in positive has two functions. Not only does it make happier, it turns on all of the learning centers in brain allowing to adapt to the world in a different way. There are ways that can train brain to be able to become more positive. Allowing brain to work more optimistically and more successfully.

link (source) : ted.com/talks/shawn_achor_the_happy_secret_to_better_work

Rinnegan45 - / 35  
Aug 16, 2016   #2
Hi there!

I want to give u some hints on your essay. here you go:

- In science of happiness, external world ...

- In studies of happiness, outside world can determine happiness level. 10% of long term happiness can be predicted by outside world and the rest of them is not predicted it. instead, it can be known by how the brain process the world.

- Based on the previous research, only ...

- Based on the previous research, only 25% of successful jobs are determined by IQ and the other 75% are settled by optimism levels, social support and ability to see stress as a challenge instead of a threat.

- Most of people nowadays have being ...

- Most people nowadays have outlined all the negative things that could happen but not talked about the positive. For example the absence of disease is not being healthy. Actually, the point is how to get healthy not about the absence of disease.

- It is need to reverse the formula for ...

- It is needed to reverse the formula for happiness and success. Most companies and schools follow a formula for success such as " If I work harder, I will be more successful and if I am more successful then I will be happier"

- If happiness is on the opposite side of ...

- If happiness is on the opposite side of success, the brain never gets there. People have pushed happiness over the cognitive horizon as a society, it's because they think "that" they have to be successful first then they will be happier right after that.

thanks
dinartika19 37 / 66  
Aug 16, 2016   #3
Hi Beauty!

10% of long term happiness canpredictby external world =>
I think the better sentence is : Ten percent of long term happiness can be predicted by an external world.

.....the remains in predicted not by the external world butis by the way of brain processes the world.

job successes => successful job

For example the absence of disease is not health. => For example [b]is that[/b] the absence of diease is not health

It is need to => it needs

Not only does ititmakes happier, itbut also turns on all of the learning centers ...


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